Ms. Marvel smiled as she glanced at the Coruscant flag and the various weapons that lay behind her.

Across the battlefield, Shang Tsung scowled at the demonic flag and the hell-themed armory. Him, a villain? What libel.

With a smile, Victor von Magnus struck the gong.

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Wakka, who realized by this point that he wasn't in a blitzball competition, glanced at the Coruscant-themed armory behind him.

On the other side of the series of elevated platforms was Dante, who stood before the standard of Diablo.

With the sound of the gong, the fight began.

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For the second round, two practitioners of magic had been brought together to do battle on a setpiece designed from a futuristic verse.

On the Coruscant end of the battle zone, Black Mage stood still and stared toward Magus, who waited before Diablo's standard.

When the gong sounded, both mages were off, much to the excitement of the crowd, who eagerly awaited the spectacle before them.

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The bandit smirked at the weapons rack in front of her. The medieval toys had been replaced with blasters, pistols, and a few things that looked interesting enough to warrant playing around with. After glancing up at the Imperial colors that floated behind her, she glanced across the elevated battleground at the young woman who stood before a large demonic standard.

Mami wore a smile herself. After the last victory, she had all the confidence she could need to face her next adversary. As the gong sounded, the magical girl readied herself for her next adversary.

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Okor shambled out for this second bout. The plague marine stared back at the armory filled with weapons and noticed a few things that were familiar to him. A glance around revealed that he was actually high above what had once been the floor of the Colosseum. A glance down revealed a foreboding gray fog.

On the other side of the battle zone, Luffy grinned as he poked at a red morning star on a rack of weapons. As he giggled to himself, Baron Victor von Magnus hit the gong and round two began.

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The Tournament takes place at the Camelot Colosseum, a massive Ancient-world stadium not unlike the Roman Colosseum at its zenith, albeit with some more ‘modern’ amenities, like places selling Camelot cuisine and trinkets not unlike the souvenirs you would find at a baseball park or football stadium.

Given the scale of the Colosseum, eight matches will take place simultaneously. The floor/arena portion of the Colosseum is 300 feet long by 200 feet wide. So each fight zone for this and round two will be about 40 feet wide and 200 feet across.

During the entire duration of the tournament, the audience will be protected by an invisible magic shield. This same shield is used to divide up the interior of the Colosseum into eight portions to prevent fights from spilling out or interrupting anyone. This barrier has a ceiling at seventy five feet.

New – All armory weapons and all environmental weapons count as Moves for the sake of avoiding the ‘Well that’s not a Move, so it doesn’t work as well against me!’ line of argument. A sword or a blaster gun from the armory functions on the same level as if it was a Move that prime had.

New – For this round only (ONCE AGAIN --- FOR ONLY THIS ROUND), Flight is limited to levitating roughly five feet above a solid surface. Super Jumping remains unchanged.

Battleground Description

‘The Battle of Coruscant’

Celebrate the great humbling of the foul Empire!

For this battle, the usual floor of the Colosseum has been replaced with a fifteen-foot layer of toxic, polluting chemicals, not unlike those that blanket all of Coruscant. Exposure to these magic toxins will immediately cause the prime to develop a fever that quickly leads to boils, nausea, and lightheadedness. Even after leaving the chemicals, these effects linger. As these effects are Camlot magic, there is no work-around, regardless of whatever reason or loophole you try to create. The area at the bottom of the battle zone is littered with broken ships, so there are weapons to be salvaged if you wind up down there.

The action takes place on a series of elevated steel platforms that float twenty to thirty feet over the foul toxins below. These platforms vary in size, shape, and elevation. A few have little shacks or steel barricades on them. There are hooks beneath most of the platforms and a few of them have little springs on them to launch primes around.

There are also four turrets dispersed amongst the elevated platforms. These can be manned by primes and cannot be destroyed by them. Two of these are Coruscant-origin (so they look like turrets from a Star Wars capital ship). The other two are demonic and fire streams of hellfire.

On one side of the battle zone stands the standard of Diablo’s army. Beneath the standard lies a hellish armory of daemonic blades, guns, and other assorted bits and baubles stands. On the other end of the zone is the foul colors of the Empire and an armory filled with their various weapons, both long-, short-, and melee-range. Both armories also have a large (ie – even stronger) turret.

Twenty feet above the platforms are two TIE fighter ships that are frozen in place. They seem impervious to damage, but once manned, these can be operated by a prime. While their lasers pack a punch, the plating on them is purposefully frail once they are operated. Be careful.


OOC Stuff

Purchases - Moves and other stuff may be purchased between fights. If you buy something during a fight, you may not use it during that fight.

The following are the rules for the first round of the tournament:

Judges: Gildarts/Caira and Thaal/BWNN
Alt Judge: Proto Man/Shang Tsung
Backup Judges: Dark Link, Edward Elric/Minato

Word Limit: 750
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Time Limit: 48 hours
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Note: There are no extensions for people who cannot make the posting deadline. If you miss a post, that will be factored into your score.

Judge Template

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This section covers how effectively the writer created the world around the reader. Making sure that the reader can understand what is being described, using vivid or appropriate descriptions of items, events and people in the story and having good word choice all go into this section of the review. Note that using “purple prose” is not always effective, nor is consistently using flat, dry description. A writer that gets a good score in this section draws the reader into the world and allows them to see through the eyes of the character/narrator.

Voice:
No two writers write in the same style, nor should they. Even individual stories call for individual writing styles, a mood that creates a tinted lens through which the story is viewed. This is traditionally called the “voice” of the writer and it is a very important part of writing. A writer with a high score in this considers tone, pacing and including/disincluding detail throughout the entire story.

Character:
Character development, the actions and motivation of characters and dialogue are all important in this section. The goal is to create “round” characters as opposed to “flat” ones. Making the people in your writing seem real, not just archetypes following a plot progression is the goal here. The writer should consider who the people they are writing as are as individuals, why they take certain actions, their personal problems and boons, how they interact with the world around themselves and how they approach problems are all considerations for a writer in this section. Note that not all GOOD characters are LIKABLE characters. If you really hate a character that’s well written, this section deserves a good score!

Story:
Every body of creative writing, no matter how short or long, follows a storyline. How well the themes, events, messages and twists grab the reader is what makes the difference between a decent story and a great story. The writer must capture the reader’s attention hold it with the actions of characters and the world around them. This isn’t to say that a writing must be packed with action or intrigue, even something as simple as eating breakfast can be made into a great story. The presentation of events and how those events tie into the writer’s voice is what makes it good reading.

Grammar and Spelling:
This is the clerical work of the body of work. Spelling, punctuation, grammar and anything else that can be considered technical goes into this section. Generally every major grammatical error per 500 words moves this section down one grade."

"1: There is room for improvement. Generally the reviewer should highlight how the writer could improve this area as well as direct them to outside sources that can give more help.

2: This section was about average. The writer has room for improvement but about par with the rest of the site’s writing ability. Reviewer should highlight areas to improve and site specific errors or weak spots.

3: This section is above average. The writer has shown a competency higher than the average writer on the site, but can still notably improve. The reviewer can be vague with their ideas for improvement but still include specific details and weak spots.

4: This section was fantastic! The writer took the reins and really took the reader on a journey. Few errors or room for improvement can be found by the reviewer but anything that the reviewer feels could be cleaned up should be noted.

5: This section is one of the best the reviewer has ever seen. This level of writing is on par with professionals with very few errors and the reviewer should have a hard time finding room to improve. This grade should be handed out rarely, and only to the very best writing!"

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Hi, I want to send in an NPC dragon named Whirlpool who has bioluminescent patches on his body and enhanced vision. He can't see through walls though, and there's no Bioluminescent power. So how do I express this?

As some of you may have already noticed about me, I am not a very...avid writer. I started roleplaying because of my dyslexia and Attention Deficit hyperactivity disorder, and I wish to get better. Everyone here that I have met is a good writer, and some amazing. I wanna know: How do I include more detail into my writing? I need something like keypoints to remember that will spark in my mind every time I write(Just like a weight lifter who's squating should remember ATG...).

Character name:
Hokori Owari Hoshi
(Translate: Dust, The Dying Star)

Character source:
Original Character from “Darker than Black” universe; before the main story.

Character history:
Hokori - Dust - was a healthy baby boy when he was born. His only misfortune in the world was he lived while the woman who had labored so hard for his birth was dead. Early on, however, another woman took her place. Loved and cared for him, seemingly as if he were her own.

But this was a facade.. Several times in his life, she thought about sinking that blade into his back, how ugly he was. To look just like her! The woman who she’d killed 16 years ago! But she waited it out, thinking she only had a couple more years to go, only to be slapped in the face by her husband with divorce papers. No. No way! He knew too much.

So they took a vacation, to the bitter cold peaks of Russia, and what waited in the tundra, was death.

Hokori watched as his step-mother tortured and taunted his father, while a strange man watched with glee. Gagged he couldn’t even call for help. But he was more enraged by all of this, instead of hopelessly lost to find his caring mother was sadistic and had murdered his real mother.

When she had her fill, she cut the elder Hoshi’s throat and set her sights on him. She decided to play with him, throwing him out into the snow and telling him he only has a five minute head start. When he asked what the head start was for, she laughed at him and told him he was supposed to be running for his life.

When she found him next, he was changed. His star activated and he was in full wolf form. When he came to, he had her head in his hands, staring at him in intense fear. He had the urge to kiss the decapitated woman and the worse part was.. He did.

He found himself back to civilization, only to be captured by the Russians. Forced to join their ranks. And logically… it was his only choice. He had nothing waiting for him back in Japan, just a lot of now meaningless friends and questions he was sure would never be answered.

There is where he stayed.. In the bitter arms of Russia.


Physical Description:

6'9", 200 pounds of pure muscle, dark hair, grey eyes, and slightly tanned skin - covered in scars.

Stats:
ATK: 4
DEF: 2
SPD: 2
TEC: 2

Starting Proficiencies:
Physical Strength Proficiency (Melee/Fighting) - 1000 OM

Starting Powers:
Survival - 2000 OM
Foresight - 1500 OM

Starting Moves:
A Pup’s Claw - 300 OM
Dust’s basic attack is partially transforming by elongating his nails. The nails become harder and black, growing out to only about an inch longer than normal. This happens over a matter of seconds, and lasts until he uses another ability.
-The cost for this is a simple kiss that lasts 3 seconds at least.

Total OM Spent: 4800/5000

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PS: Ash's Alternate/Secondary Character.