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In the end Diablo's probably going to get the Black Gates open some day and we're all gonna die anyway, so we might as well get thrashed!

DISCLAIMER! Do not take this game seriously. Pls gaize. Just don't. Drink responsibly, or even better, don't drink at all. If this game turns you into a raging alcoholic, don't blame me. Kay? Thanks

Judges will post up their score card in this thread. Discussion can be held in the main Tournament Discussion thread.

Hiya my name is Gamzee Makara and I'm gonna make a thread! >

So anyways, This is the Character Content Thread, as explained by the topic title above. Should be pretty obvious what it's for! But for all you scrubs that can't read, here's what this is about:

So words can only explain and show so much; especially our words! So I'm putting this thread here for those of you that seek to provide more exposition on your characters. This could be presented through many mediums: Animation, Music, Stories, Art, Voice Acting, and pretty much any other form of media.

So that's what this thread is for! The main theme here is that if you feel at a loss for your own words, maybe someone else's can help : D But it's also just for fun!

An example:
This is a damn good example of Sober Gamzee.

And THIIIIIISS is a good example of Gamzee while he's just chillin c:

If you're new to the site, or just changing character, and need your name changed, post here that you need your name changed.

I thought that this would be better than just having people keep making threads about getting their names changed.

As noted in "About the World" section it is impossible to create a flying car or something of that matter without using it as an Assist anywhere except Coruscant and Camelot. My question is - is it possible to summon, or outright build from scratch from summoned or scavenged parts, a blimp or dirigible in Verses other than those two noted?

In addition - is it possible for either of those to be used as representation of "Flight" power?

Somewhere in the night he was being chased, though he couldn't see by who, or what, it was. All that Devon could see was the grin, the strange ever present grin that followed him everywhere. No matter where he went, or what alley he turned down, it was always behind him. Eventually it would catch up, it would pounce on him from a roof, or he would turn down a dead end, but no matter what he did it always would catch him.

At that, as always, would be the point when he would wake up.

Devon, known to most as Brother Devon, shot up in cot he was sleeping on and after a few moments wiped the sweat from his forehead. For the past few weeks the frequency and intensity of these dreams had increased. Whatever the cause Devon would have to look into it later, for now he had to thank his hosts and then be on his way.

He had been staying with the Vernon family for a few weeks now, the arrangement being that he would stay and help fix the fence and when it was done he would be on his way. They were a nice family and had kept their word, he had three meals a day, as well as a nice cot to sleep on in the garage. It also helped that the man got along with the couples son, Rory, and would watch them for his parents whenever they needed a break. Sadly though his time here was at an end, the fence was fine and sturdy, and the road was calling to him once more.

He got dressed, his usually t-shirt and jeans combo with the white leather jacket, and then wiped the sleep from his eyes with his gloved hands. Feeling a bit more awake he stretched his limbs out before packing up his belongings and taking one last look around his temporary home. The garage had been covered with his clothing, books, and scrolls, which now were stuffed into his ruck sack, and without them the place now looked very empty. His sword, the roman gladius always had with him, lay under his bed were he always left it when he wasn't going out somewhere. Picking it up he strapped it to his waist and then drew the blade, staring at it.

As far as sword went it was pretty plain, a hilt with no markings and a wooden grip, the blade had no decorations other then his name engraved in it, leather scabbard, and little else. While it was a sturdy sword it was nothing special, but holding it always brought back the memories of when he was presented it. Roman history had always been a fravourite subject of his, so when the master-at-arms had to decide which weapon to train Devon in this is what he had presented him, he said it was an early birthday gift of course. Even holding it now brought back memories of that time and place.

With a sigh Decon replaced the blade in its' scabbard and took one last look around. It had been nice place to stay, but like all things it too must pass. Making his way from the garage into the house proper Devon navigated into the kitchen where he saw Kathy Vernon and his husband Mike waiting for him, a plate of eggs and toast with a large cup of coffee waiting there for him.

“Figured ya'd need this before ya go.” Mike rumbled to him in the low tone of voice of his, to which Devon bowed his head and thanked the man.

“Yes, thank you Broth... er...I mean, Mike. Thank you, you didn't have to, but, thank you.” Devon had learned in the first few days here that calling everyone brother or sister as he normally would do was not the proper thing to do. It was Mike, Kathy, Rory, and nothing else would do. Devon had liked the family instantly from that point on.

”Of course we did!” Kathy told him, smiling that ever lovely smile of hers! You know the kind, the ones that would melt even the coldest of hearts. ”You helped us lots with that fence, and were never no bother to us! It is the least we could do. Now hush up and eat!”

The young monk had learned not to argue when the law had been laid down so clearly so he nodded, sat down, and ate. The eggs were perfect, as always, over east just the way he liked them. The toast smelled great, rye with a good helping of butter! The coffee was just the way he liked it, how did that saying go? Black as night and as sweet as sin, though Devon didn't really like that sin part, you don't have to be religious to not like sin, still it was just a saying he guessed.

After he finished devouring his food he got up and bowed to the both of them, thanking them again for everything. They tried to give him money again, as they did almost every day for the past week, but he declined. They needed to much more then he did, plus he had made a vow to not gain personal wealth for himself, and this was something he took very seriously. The odd times he was forced to take money he only used the bare minimum to survive, he always donated or gave away the rest. As he was heading out of the ktichen a voice called to him.

”Don't forget to say bye to Rory before you go!” He turned back and smiled, nodding his head, of course he wouldn't!

“Of course not Kathy, again thank you, both of you.” Turning around Devon left the kitchen and made his way down the hall. He came to the living room, where he assumed Rory was by the sounds of the cartoons coming through the closed door, and reached out for the handle.

How do you tell a child that had grown accustomed to having you around that you now had to leave? With a sigh he held on to the door handle and twisted, opening the door. Instead of the living room he was greeted by a flash of white light as the world around him melted into nothingness.


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Devon opened his eyes slowly, staring up into what seemed to be a vast expanse of, well, white and little else. Sitting up he rubbed his eyes and then sat there holding his temples due to having a massive headache, one so bad that if he actually drank he assumed this would be what a hang over would feel like. Something in the back of his mind was bothering him, he vaguely remembered something about a grinning thing, it was man shaped but there was no way he could have called that human. Maybe it had been another dream. Maybe the whole thing had just been a dream and he was still in the cot in the Vernons' garage. Reaching down he expected to feel the steel pipes in the edge but found only bricks, and this of course caused him to really focus on his surroundings. He was not in the garage, not one bit, he was in fact in front of a very fancy stone fountain in the middle of a white expanse.

He sat there, not moving nor blinking, for a few moments when all the memories came flooding back. The grinning man and his words.

Quote:“My name is Omni. This is not the world you know. This is the Omniverse. You interest me, so I have made you part of it. The Omniverse is a place that reflects the wishes of those who are part of it. But! There are rules. I will explain them only once, so listen carefully.”

Quote:This is Omnilium. It’s what ties the Omniverse together. Without it, you are nothing. With it, anything you desire can be yours. But you will need more than this. If you desire it enough, you will find it. You will find that using it comes naturally. Just think of what you desire most. 

Hey folks, we're bout to enter a big, multi-tiered, super awesome competition. What I'm gonna address here is the idea that it will be your WRITING that wins the rounds for you. Most of the fights on the Omniverse, and especially the Colosseum fights we are about to embark in, are decided by writing ability. Of course, we all have stats, ability benchmarks and ways that our characters are restricted, that's part of RPG aspect of the site. Higher stats, Moves, Powers and abilities are things that give you WRITING FLEXIBILITY, allowing you to do more with your character, which usually allows you to have more entertaining posts!

However, these things are still not the deciding factor, it's your writing. Having a stronger, faster, BETTER character than your opponent DOES give you an advantage: writing flexibility. You can do much more with a story if your character has fun Moves, interesting Powers, and can be justified in being better at attack or defense or fighting ability than their opponent; they are more tools in your toolbox. But those tools only amount to how you use them.

So, my main thing here that I'm trying to dispel is the idea that characters of higher level and with more Moves etc have an INHERENT score advantage. No, they don't. They have the advantage of writing opportunity. If you create a more INTERESTING NARRATIVE with straight 1s in your stats and no moves, then you can win the round against Mega-Power-Ranger-Vampire-Werewolf-Wolverine who writes like garbage.

Also of note: just because your CHARACTER is losing a fight doesn't mean your WRITING is. If you write a compelling story about trying to pull a victory from nothing; if you are beaten, saggy and ruined while your opponent stands over you like a sterling-silver Superman, and you your writing evokes EMOTION, it evokes an ENTERTAINING NARRATIVE, then you will WIN THAT FIGHT.

So yes, strategize about your Moves. Think about your approach. Plot and scheme. But don't get too wrapped up in the numbers.
Get wrapped up in the story.


Recap of grading card:
[spoiler]"Description and Clarity:
This section covers how effectively the writer created the world around the reader. Making sure that the reader can understand what is being described, using vivid or appropriate descriptions of items, events and people in the story and having good word choice all go into this section of the review. Note that using “purple prose” is not always effective, nor is consistently using flat, dry description. A writer that gets a good score in this section draws the reader into the world and allows them to see through the eyes of the character/narrator.

Voice:
No two writers write in the same style, nor should they. Even individual stories call for individual writing styles, a mood that creates a tinted lens through which the story is viewed. This is traditionally called the “voice” of the writer and it is a very important part of writing. A writer with a high score in this considers tone, pacing and including/disincluding detail throughout the entire story.

Character:
Character development, the actions and motivation of characters and dialogue are all important in this section. The goal is to create “round” characters as opposed to “flat” ones. Making the people in your writing seem real, not just archetypes following a plot progression is the goal here. The writer should consider who the people they are writing as are as individuals, why they take certain actions, their personal problems and boons, how they interact with the world around themselves and how they approach problems are all considerations for a writer in this section. Note that not all GOOD characters are LIKABLE characters. If you really hate a character that’s well written, this section deserves a good score!

Story:
Every body of creative writing, no matter how short or long, follows a storyline. How well the themes, events, messages and twists grab the reader is what makes the difference between a decent story and a great story. The writer must capture the reader’s attention hold it with the actions of characters and the world around them. This isn’t to say that a writing must be packed with action or intrigue, even something as simple as eating breakfast can be made into a great story. The presentation of events and how those events tie into the writer’s voice is what makes it good reading.

Grammar and Spelling:
This is the clerical work of the body of work. Spelling, punctuation, grammar and anything else that can be considered technical goes into this section. Generally every major grammatical error per 500 words moves this section down one grade."

"1: There is room for improvement. Generally the reviewer should highlight how the writer could improve this area as well as direct them to outside sources that can give more help.

2: This section was about average. The writer has room for improvement but about par with the rest of the site’s writing ability. Reviewer should highlight areas to improve and site specific errors or weak spots.

3: This section is above average. The writer has shown a competency higher than the average writer on the site, but can still notably improve. The reviewer can be vague with their ideas for improvement but still include specific details and weak spots.

4: This section was fantastic! The writer took the reins and really took the reader on a journey. Few errors or room for improvement can be found by the reviewer but anything that the reviewer feels could be cleaned up should be noted.

5: This section is one of the best the reviewer has ever seen. This level of writing is on par with professionals with very few errors and the reviewer should have a hard time finding room to improve. This grade should be handed out rarely, and only to the very best writing!" (There will likely be almost none of these assigned during the tournament, so just be aware of that.)[/spoiler]

Quote:This is a retelling of a past event which occurred during Alex's life before the omniverse. It is rated "M" for its violent nature which can be construed as excessively graphic and constant violence throughout. As a sidenote, since this occurs prior to his arrival in the omniverse, Alex has access below to abilities which he does not currently possess within the RP. This is, once again, a retelling of past events.

Do physical traits which are clearly stated to be owned by your character in your Character Profile such as - for example - claws, horns and a tail (which applies to my character) need to be purchased as moves to be used? I figure the answer is yes seeing as they are technically a weapon, but don't want to assume and waste OM if it's not necessary.