Weiss Vs Sans for the survival of the underground

[Weiss Deathwind]

Because We''ll never get the opportunity to do it in Omniverse canon, so why not?

This is for OOC discussion(and judge hunting) of our fight thread, and to set down parameters.

Mock fight: Weiss Vs. Sans
Rounds: 3
Words: 800
Arena: Hall of Judgement
[spoiler][/spoiler]

Judge: still looking!

[Harry Dresden]

I was gonna read the heck out of this, I can judge

[Weiss Deathwind]

I'd love to have you as a judge! If sans is okay with it I'd have no problem with you judging

[Sans]

Why the heck not?!

[Sans]

Intro. Is. Posted.

Transformation. Used.

1 out of 2 SP remaining.

May the Battle. Commence.

[Sans]

Annnnnnnd posted. Round 1 post done!

[Sans]

Gonna bump this just so Weiss doesn't forget

[Sans]

Posted my Round 2 Post!

[Sans]

Round 3 Complete!

The mock fight is now ready for judging!

[Sans]

Bumping. Want to see if anyone else is willing to judge if Harry Dresden is unavailable.

[Sans]

Bump! Bump!

[Corporal Light]

Still need a judge

http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=5507 <-- Link to fight thread.

[Sans]

Still need a judge! xD

Link to the fight thread is in the previous post.

[Kaylee]

I judge the thingie thing. Expect me to take awhile because of my dyslexia and ADHD, other than that, I will get it up by Thursday night.

[Crocodile]

I'll read over this during work, as time allows, and give a verdict once I get home.

[Crocodile]

Weiss: You MAY be overusing ellipses. Granted, some of it came from Sans' speech, so those I can overlook, but I AM seeing a lot of them and it's a bit distracting from the story. Seeing some minor spelling and capitalization errors here and there. Nothing major, but these are things that could be avoided via a Wordcheck. In a few places, I felt like you could have worded things differently to improve the mental image you were hoping to project, but once again it was minor.

All that said, you had excellent imagery in your writing and your motives came through clearly. You clearly paid attention to your opponent's stats in comparison to your own. You toughed out his speedy, but weak, attacks and had trouble hitting him. A particular strength you showed was in your internal turmoil.

Sans: I'm not seeing a lot of wordage variety in this post. Not a bad thing, but thinking you might look to including some synonyms in your writing. If you used "girl" in one sentence, perhaps "opponent" would have been better in the second. Like Weiss, I'm catching some mispellings here and there, but nothing too major.

As with Weiss, you had excellent imagery and motivation. I felt like it came through a bit more clearly in your writing than in hers, particularly in describing the arena you were in.

Both: Neither of you went over your word-count, so yay!


Ok, so this is how I grade.

Enjoyability: (1-10) Did I like what I was reading, or did I end up skimming? How much did you engage me? Did you have a lot of mispellings or grammar errors which made it hard to read?

Penalties0-Whatever) Did you go over wordcount or miss a deadline? Pretty much the only things I look for in regards to this category. -1 point for every infraction.

SP: Every SP you spend during the fight gives you 1 point in this category.

So, here are my grades.

Weiss
Enjoyability: 8
Penalties: 0
SP: 2
Total: 10

Sans
Enjoyability: 8
Penalties: 0
SP: 1 (Sorry, you used the first SP in the Intro Post. I only include SP you spend during the Combat Posts, even if the effects of the spent SP go into the Combat itself.)
Total: 9

Weiss is the victor, in my opinion. That said, it was extremely close and if not for the SP category, it'd probably have been a draw.

I dunno if Staff give rewards for these OOC fights, but if they do, I'd recommend granting 200 OM to Weiss and 100 to Sans, with Weiss getting the extra as a "victor's" prize.