06-02-2017, 02:39 PM
(06-02-2017, 01:45 PM)Mark Wrote: Welcome to the Omniverse!
So for your history, it all looks good. This might be obvious already but I do have to point out that you start in the Nexus regardless, so if you want this to be a little teaser into what you plan to do that's perfectly fine. Just so that you know you can't immediately post in Coruscant.
High-Speed Kick Combo: Strictly speaking, you don't need a move to pull off a combo like this. If you want to keep it as a move so that it's stronger than regular punching and kicking would be that's also fine, just letting you know. It's approvable as-is.
Coiled Tentacle Cannon: Roughly how damaging is this (as strong as a punch, like being hit with a bat, etc?) How fast are the tentacles launched, roughly? Does the charge-up require significant concentration (could she take a hit, dodge, and/or parry and keep charging, etc.)? Can this be used simultaneously with another move? How tiring is this to perform?
Balled Water: How long is the cast time on this? You've listed Ranged Materialize; does that mean she can form the ball far away from herself, and if so how far? Can it be cast while moving? When you say "has to concentrate hardly", do you mean like she barely has to focus or she has to focus quite hard? How draining is this on her stamina? Can this be used in tandem with other moves?
Yeah the second part of the history is just a teaser for the future of Abyss.
Also, I fixed the moves with your advice.