06-09-2016, 09:36 PM
You want this to be 'World Building' yet, when everything's said an done, this, "Not that the outside would be affected or even care anyhow", will be how the rest of the Omniverse views this event?
That's not really world building, it's more like... something that doesn't matter? If you want to do some world building, then you have to effect something in the world.
I think you also expect this to move a little too fast. The clans you mentioned are already there and are already at the point of war with each other? You need to establish that the clans are there before getting into the war between them. Anyone reading this would be kind of confused as to where they came from.
That's not really world building, it's more like... something that doesn't matter? If you want to do some world building, then you have to effect something in the world.
I think you also expect this to move a little too fast. The clans you mentioned are already there and are already at the point of war with each other? You need to establish that the clans are there before getting into the war between them. Anyone reading this would be kind of confused as to where they came from.