06-05-2016, 09:41 PM
I'm no staff, but I think I can help answer your questions Kalli!
1. I'm fairly certain you are allowed to do this, as my character Ballad completely wiped out a bandit group all by himself. Two groups of secondaries destroying each other doesn't seem too far of a stretch from that.
Granted, though, the bandit group Ballad killed was composed of about 35-40 members, and not the hundreds you are saying each group has, so it might be different in this case.
2. I don't know how to answer this one. In my honest opinion, it should stick to one thread for pacing purposes, as it becomes disorganized and probably a little confusing going through each thread in that way.
My responses to the plot summary are also listed in spoilers, since I assume you'll want feedback on it as well. It's mostly general commentary on things that I noticed in the summary.
[spoiler]The first thing I noticed is that it feels kinda odd that Kalli wouldn't get noticed freeing the prisoner, who would free the other prisoner, who would free the other prisoners, etc. Then again, this is a summary, so this might be accounted for in the actual story.
The actual plotline, from what I can see, would actually cause Kalli to become more notable in the Endless Dunes, as she is assisting one group in taking down another group. This would most likely give her some influence.
The second thing I find odd is how Kalli is a Prime, yet when she gets her legs broken and all that, she doesn't actually heal her wounds fully. She obviously can, since she's a Prime, and she has a week to do it. The pain can't be THAT disorienting, can it?
Other than those two things, though, I'm genuinely interested in what this will do to Kalli. It's like a rite of passage over a long arc. I love it.[/spoiler]
1. I'm fairly certain you are allowed to do this, as my character Ballad completely wiped out a bandit group all by himself. Two groups of secondaries destroying each other doesn't seem too far of a stretch from that.
Granted, though, the bandit group Ballad killed was composed of about 35-40 members, and not the hundreds you are saying each group has, so it might be different in this case.
2. I don't know how to answer this one. In my honest opinion, it should stick to one thread for pacing purposes, as it becomes disorganized and probably a little confusing going through each thread in that way.
My responses to the plot summary are also listed in spoilers, since I assume you'll want feedback on it as well. It's mostly general commentary on things that I noticed in the summary.
[spoiler]The first thing I noticed is that it feels kinda odd that Kalli wouldn't get noticed freeing the prisoner, who would free the other prisoner, who would free the other prisoners, etc. Then again, this is a summary, so this might be accounted for in the actual story.
The actual plotline, from what I can see, would actually cause Kalli to become more notable in the Endless Dunes, as she is assisting one group in taking down another group. This would most likely give her some influence.
The second thing I find odd is how Kalli is a Prime, yet when she gets her legs broken and all that, she doesn't actually heal her wounds fully. She obviously can, since she's a Prime, and she has a week to do it. The pain can't be THAT disorienting, can it?
Other than those two things, though, I'm genuinely interested in what this will do to Kalli. It's like a rite of passage over a long arc. I love it.[/spoiler]
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