Joining: Granite

[Granite]

Im not a mod but want to be so Imma help you out here.

First: You have a good background, but maybe expand on what exactly was going before he got wooshed away from Gothic Russia.

Second: Your move should require the proficiencies in the description. Like this Outstreched Guard 300 Om requires Area Shield proficiency
-Description-

You should also meantion how long it takes to ready this gaurd. 12 feet is a wide space to cover and your speed is low so it will require some time to take effect. Lastly maybe mention how much this attack absorbs damage. Your defense is extremely high so he should be able to take a good amount of punishment, but characters with equal atk to you def will be able to bash though it more easily than one with much lower ATK like I.

Third: Disclaimer- I AM NOT A MOD NOR AM I ASSUMING I AM. I merely wish to help the mods out before tbey take on subjects I already understand need tweeking.

Thanks a lot for helping me out, I'll be sure to correct the move immediately. And I left Granite's history afterwards out to give me more time really flesh it out and give me an opportunity to a few backflashes. But if you think it would make him more likely to be approved, then I'll gladly give more info