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[Demetri Malius]

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[spoiler]"Damn these royal bastards, no different than those back home." Demetri harshly whispered to nobody in particular, thinking aloud.

The thief was at a clear disadvantage in this encounter. With three against him and the ottsel, they would have a hard time escaping. Within the past few minutes, Demetri had barely scraped by without too much injury. His dark clothing were singed, the cloth hardened by the heat of flames, as well as a few cuts and holes in the garments, his blood and skin revealed beneath the leather. The two deep gashes in his legs, inflicted by Victor, pained him the most. His movement was impaired, slowed by the sharp pain with each step. Demetri's cloak was the most damaged, the simple cloth always a moment behind his movements.

Fortunately, Demetri had managed to get his companion out of the immediate area, along with his lost secondary, IRIS. If current events didn't go as planned, which Demetri figured they wouldn't, at least they would be able to escape. It wouldn't be the first time Demetri would face the punishment of his actions, but as long as he played his cards right, he had a chance.

Demetri faced the three primes before him, however, another presence slipped into his senses. Demetri used his deception again as the figure soon arrived, and the solo strategist waited in the shadows, trying to interpret whether he was a friend or foe. As soon as the man began to utter friendly words to the prime in blue clothing, Demetri sent a chain his way, slashing at his left leg, hoping to cause enough damage to slow his movement. He needed these primes to be as hindered as possible to allow his escape. The thief attempted to execute a follow up attack, but was blocked by the prime his target had talked to. Demetri gritted his teeth in discontent, annoyed at his blocked attack.

The thief watched as the group quickly exchanged some words, and Victor began to give chase to the ottsel.

I'll be damned if I'm going to let you get away.

The rogue shot his trusty chains to the fleeing assassin, his focus and determination fueling his speed and aim. The chain mechanism prepared his shot, the gears inside grinding and forcing the spring mechanism to arm, before giving a quick release. With a soft jingle, the chains pierced the air, the metal shining with the reflection of the burning sun. The mechanism hummed with satisfaction at its successful launch, the gears spinning, giving enough slack to allow the chains their maximum projected speed. Demetri's eyes followed its trajectory, cracking a soft smile as his weapon reached for his target.

KLINK!

The sudden striking of metal caused the thief to narrow his eyes, his chain going limp mid-air before quickly returning for repairs.

The new arrival stood with a pistol aimed to the air, the gun smoking with freshly ignited gunpowder. The bullet had barely saved the prime's ally, piercing the chain and splitting is from its blade. The separated blade fell from the air, landing with a soft thud in the sand. Victor quickly vanished as he tracked the ottsel's trail out into the streets.

The thief turned his attention back to the three primes before him.

Victor's savior was quick to aim his second pistol at the thief, firing a second round. The worn thief barely deflected the bullet with his swordbreaker, at the cost of the blade being destroyed. Demetri had not faced such weapons before, and was perplexed at the force behind them. How could such small arms carry so much force?

The thief's quick thoughts were interrupted as he realized the blue-clothed prime had finished charging up another fire attack. Demetri began to try and dodge to his left, but suddenly found a blade stuck in his arm. Demetri reacted with his own blade being shot at its owner, who held a rope to his blade. With a tug from both primes, they were flung through they air, their faces grimacing before landing beside each other.

Sasuke quickly sputtered as he choked down his flame, refusing to look disgraceful with an collateral damage to an ally. Meanwhile, Erik stood in the back charging his own chakram attack. Shay and Demetri quickly stood up, Demetri summoning his swordbreaker once again and Shay unsheathing his sword and dagger. The thief quickly exchanged blows with the rogue assassin, while the Uchiha used a burst of speed to give a surprise attack to the intruder.

Demetri was shoved to the side with a kick, sending him into the range of Erik's prepared attack. The thief's eyes widened as the ring of energy shot towards him. With a quick spin and thrust of his hands, Demetri managed to get himself airborne, just a foot of the ground, but enough to aim his body to the hole in the center of the attack. As he pushed through, he felt a sharp pain on his sides, the energy having burned through his leather clothing and some of his flesh.

With a grunt, Demetri slowly stood up, out of breath from defending from the previous attacks. His legs ached with pain, the blood now seeped completely through his clothes and now tainting the sand with its crimson color. The three primes faced him once more. It was no use fighting, he needed to escape.

Demetri then paused for a moment as the three prepared their attacks. Shay stood with a rifle, Sasuke signed his fire technique, and Erik charged another chakhram.

Demetri slipped away, leaving a clone in his wake as he struggled to run after Victor. The three primes unleashed their attacks upon the clone, who began by deflecting the muskets bullet and sliding around the ring of energy, before then preparing for the fire, which never came. Sasuke had already passed the clone, following the visible trail of blood in the sand to follow the man who thought could deceive the great Uchiha.[/spoiler]

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