09-10-2015, 10:20 PM
Thank you for that wonderfully comprehensive review, Gildaryn! <3
I'll keep in mind that the final ruling is in the hands of the staff, but I definitely appreciate your opinion regardless. I think I will find someone to bounce ideas off like you said, I just cannot bring myself to think and come up with anything but the vaguest plans of were I'm going to take the quest. >_>
And I realize now that there's nothing motivating Makoto in the eyes of the reader except this one line about wanting to go home I threw in the first post, I gotta work on that.
I wasn't sure if I wanted to have an NPC somewhere in the thread, or if I was just going to isolate the guy for however long the quest takes, but I agree that interacting with one would be preferable to just having all the dialogue be in his head like a crazy dude.
While there're only two other void quests on the site, they're both done masterfully, and I'm sure I'll learn a lot when I get to reading them, both pertaining to void quests and writing in general. I've been meaning to read them for a while now but.. they're super long :effort: .
I'll try and remember to make it interesting when I write first person, I know how it can get pretty boring and bland if the character is treated as a narrator when they're supposed to be the person living through the events happening right now :/
All in all, that was amazingly helpful, and I'll probably keep the post open in a tab when I get to writing the next part of the thread. Thanks, Gildy.
I'll keep in mind that the final ruling is in the hands of the staff, but I definitely appreciate your opinion regardless. I think I will find someone to bounce ideas off like you said, I just cannot bring myself to think and come up with anything but the vaguest plans of were I'm going to take the quest. >_>
And I realize now that there's nothing motivating Makoto in the eyes of the reader except this one line about wanting to go home I threw in the first post, I gotta work on that.
I wasn't sure if I wanted to have an NPC somewhere in the thread, or if I was just going to isolate the guy for however long the quest takes, but I agree that interacting with one would be preferable to just having all the dialogue be in his head like a crazy dude.
While there're only two other void quests on the site, they're both done masterfully, and I'm sure I'll learn a lot when I get to reading them, both pertaining to void quests and writing in general. I've been meaning to read them for a while now but.. they're super long :effort: .
I'll try and remember to make it interesting when I write first person, I know how it can get pretty boring and bland if the character is treated as a narrator when they're supposed to be the person living through the events happening right now :/
All in all, that was amazingly helpful, and I'll probably keep the post open in a tab when I get to writing the next part of the thread. Thanks, Gildy.