09-04-2015, 11:16 AM
Looks pretty good so far. A few points though:
History: You don't need to tell us what your character will do and feel when you're in the Omniverse, we just need the know the moment she was taken. Also, can you be a bit more exact with the point of summoning? Don't really have to, but it would be nice.
Buff Proficiency: This is for buffing others, not buffing yourself. Please decide if you want to keep this proficiency as you seem to have only bought it for your Dragon Bomb attack.
Dragon Claws: How long are the claws in inches? Length could determine how deep a wound could the make. I mean, i can see them in your picture, but I'd prefer if the move said it.
Dragon Bomb: As this only serves one function, this would be priced at 300. Also, as already stated, you don't need buff prof for this, the fact you are taking the time to charge is enough to make this move stronger. That said, would like to know how long she charges. The longer the charge, the more powerful your attack.
History: You don't need to tell us what your character will do and feel when you're in the Omniverse, we just need the know the moment she was taken. Also, can you be a bit more exact with the point of summoning? Don't really have to, but it would be nice.
Buff Proficiency: This is for buffing others, not buffing yourself. Please decide if you want to keep this proficiency as you seem to have only bought it for your Dragon Bomb attack.
Dragon Claws: How long are the claws in inches? Length could determine how deep a wound could the make. I mean, i can see them in your picture, but I'd prefer if the move said it.
Dragon Bomb: As this only serves one function, this would be priced at 300. Also, as already stated, you don't need buff prof for this, the fact you are taking the time to charge is enough to make this move stronger. That said, would like to know how long she charges. The longer the charge, the more powerful your attack.
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