Let's Read Book Club #16

[Thaal Sinestro]

Book Club 16

Eye of the Storm 1-5

[spoiler]Woop woop! Endless Dunes for the win! I’ve read a lot of your work in this particular Verse, and enjoy the spin you bring to the deadly desert. You always seem to make it exciting, yet still manage to let the cracks of desperation (such as the TWNN) to pierce through, giving a good dynamic and alternative as well as purpose to the violent action that ensues (such as the ambush in this thread).

Your adjectives complement the area you are describing very well, and emphasize the characters that interact with one another. The suspenseful scene and description leading up to Sinestro’s debut was well done and not overpowered.

I like reading your work because I can be totally absorbed and not really have to feel like I have to add anything, or bring out my own opinion. Its all your own work and I enjoy the way you write the story, and how it leads into the action to come.

Your use of dialogue is very effective in getting across the interaction Sinestro has with other characters, as well as conveying his desires and personality. I also felt you did an excellent job with Roland, the back and forth ripostes are brief but brimming with wit. (I enjoyed the allusion to the Prince as well, it posed as a personal cue in on Roland’s misguided mentality.)

Suggestions: Though I like the way you convey an outward description, don’t be afraid to make it a little more personal! I felt myself wanting to know more about Sinestro as I read, perhaps by reaction, dialogue did this well, but knowing what he thinks of something can help the reader understand and relate to him better.

Anyway it read very well and I felt like it flowed in a good pace with the events that played out.You have a nice vocabulary, and your work is very inventive. I like all the integration of ideas you are bringing to the Dunes and I think you should keep up the good work.

I like the ending because it stops after a very thrilling action scene before pausing at a bit of a cliffhanger. It can be interesting to the reader when posts are ended like this because it makes them want to know what happens next, or more straightforwardly, read the next series.[/spoiler]

I really appreciate the read! I'm glad you liked what you saw! After I did all these book-clubs, I actually went back and re-assessed a lot of my own writing, and I totally agree with having more outright description. Sometimes I get a little TOO caught up in a "show don't tell" mentality, and I forget to make the world more visible and fleshed out. It's something I'm working on. Thank you for your insights, I really appreciate them.