Sjouren Tulin

[Sjouren Tulin]

Character name:Sjouren Tulin

Character source:Original 

Character history:

Sjouren hails from the world Terren A magically abundant world that is relatively peaceful save the monsters that roam the land.

 A mage of considerable talent Sjouren has studied a wide variety of magic from the mages guild. His specialty being summoning, though he is well versed in the evocation school as well. As part of the mages guild, his duties consisted of monster research he has cataloged over a thousand creatures and is considered to be the expert on monster biology and physiology. It is during his research that he devised a way to create a creature from his soul.Sjouren Was in the middle of the ritual to summon his Anima the living embodiment of his soul when things went horribly wrong a rival mage sabotaged the spell circle causing the circle to explode outwards.

Before the explosion took his life he was summoned to the Omniverse.

Physical Description: (originals only)

Sjouren is a human standing 5'9'' tall. He is an older looking gentlemen being in his mid-forties his hair has gone to a silver hue and he wears a neatly trimmed beard. He has a kindly face and wears an old style pair of glasses. He wears the robes of the mages guild of his homeland a white robe decorated with gryphons. On his head is a classically styled wizard hat the same color of his robe.

Stats:
ATK:3
DEF:2
SPD:2
TEC:3

Starting Proficiencies:
Ranged Proficiency 
Area attack proficiency 
Area shield proficiency
Starting Powers:
N/A
Starting Moves:

Circle of Arcane Bolts:  A magic attack Sjouren conjures a purple spell circle that fires arcane bolts and sends them flying towards his enemies must be aimed and is considerably weak but can be fired continuously for one minute in intervals (requires ranged attack proficiency and area attack proficiency)

Circle of Protection: Sjouren Summons a circle of protection around himself and/or others he cannot move while channeling this move and it requires a lot of concentration and energy (Variable, Requires Area shield proficiency )


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[ElFailzalot]

Hello there, and welcome to the Omniverse! Let's just have us a look here and see what we can see.

Only thing that needs work is your moves, so let's tackle those.


Circle of Arcane Bolts: Alright, so...neat concept, if I'm reading it right. Needs more details though.
-- How long does it take to conjure the spell circle?
-- How many arcane bolts are fired at a time?
-- What is the speed of the bolts once they are fired?
-- What is the interval between each firing of the bolts?
-- How draining is it to maintain this circle?
-- Does it require concentration to maintain?
-- Can it be broken or dissipated in any way?
-- Can you use it with other moves?

Circle of Protection: Good concept, again, but needs more details.
-- How long does it take to summon the circle of protection?
-- How big is the circle?
-- What is the appearance of the circle? Assuming it's some sort of shield or ring of glowing runes or the like?
-- How strong is the protection it offers?
-- Can it be broken by a strong enough attack, or enough repeated hits?
-- How long can he maintain concentration on it?
-- How draining is it to maintain?
-- You say he can summon it around others, does that mean at range, like around his allies and such? That would probably require Ranged Materialize Proficiency if so, unless you mean he can just summon a circle around himself big enough to include others.
-- If he can summon it at range around others, does it move with them?

[Sjouren Tulin]

Circle of Arcane Bolts:

After concentrating for 30 sec an arcane circle slowly starts to appear above his head. after 10 seconds the arcane circle is completely formed where it waits for a mental command it does not need to be maintained. Sjouren then has to aim each volley of 10 or 20 bolts in a general direction. Each volley drains a considerable amount of energy from him and he must wait another 30 seconds for him to use it again. He can use other spells in the interval wait period but doing so drains his energy even further once his energy is exhausted the circle shatters and can not be summoned again for at least another day. The circle takes the form of runic writing made out of a purple energy.


Circle of protection:

this glowing spherical circle is summoned instantaneously and covers the user and three nearby allies. It has just enough room for four people and is centered on the caster. it uses the casters tec score to block attacks any attack higher then the casters tec will break the shield also repeated attacks can break the shield given enough time. The shield takes all the casters concentration to maintain and is extremely taxing to keep up but is a reliable shield. The shield takes the form of glowing runic letters surrounding the caster and allies in a spherical circle.

[Sjouren Tulin]

Hello there, and welcome to the Omniverse! Let's just have us a look here and see what we can see.

Only thing that needs work is your moves, so let's tackle those.


Circle of Arcane Bolts: Alright, so...neat concept, if I'm reading it right. Needs more details though.
-- How long does it take to conjure the spell circle?
-- How many arcane bolts are fired at a time?
-- What is the speed of the bolts once they are fired?
-- What is the interval between each firing of the bolts?
-- How draining is it to maintain this circle?
-- Does it require concentration to maintain?
-- Can it be broken or dissipated in any way?
-- Can you use it with other moves?

Circle of Protection: Good concept, again, but needs more details.
-- How long does it take to summon the circle of protection?
-- How big is the circle?
-- What is the appearance of the circle? Assuming it's some sort of shield or ring of glowing runes or the like?
-- How strong is the protection it offers?
-- Can it be broken by a strong enough attack, or enough repeated hits?
-- How long can he maintain concentration on it?
-- How draining is it to maintain?
-- You say he can summon it around others, does that mean at range, like around his allies and such? That would probably require Ranged Materialize Proficiency if so, unless you mean he can just summon a circle around himself big enough to include others.
-- If he can summon it at range around others, does it move with them?



is this better

[Sjouren Tulin]

hello? are these better?

Circle of Arcane Bolts:

After concentrating for 30 sec an arcane circle slowly starts to appear above his head. after 10 seconds the arcane circle is completely formed where it waits for a mental command it does not need to be maintained. Sjouren then has to aim each volley of 10 or 20 bolts in a general direction. Each volley drains a considerable amount of energy from him and he must wait another 30 seconds for him to use it again. He can use other spells in the interval wait period but doing so drains his energy even further once his energy is exhausted the circle shatters and can not be summoned again for at least another day. The circle takes the form of runic writing made out of a purple energy.


Circle of protection:

this glowing spherical circle is summoned instantaneously and covers the user and three nearby allies. It has just enough room for four people and is centered on the caster. it uses the casters tec score to block attacks any attack higher then the casters tec will break the shield also repeated attacks can break the shield given enough time. The shield takes all the casters concentration to maintain and is extremely taxing to keep up but is a reliable shield. The shield takes the form of glowing runic letters surrounding the caster and allies in a spherical circle.

[ElFailzalot]

Apologies for the delay. Encountered some difficulties that demanded my attention for a bit.

hello? are these better?

Circle of Arcane Bolts:

After concentrating for 30 sec an arcane circle slowly starts to appear above his head. after 10 seconds the arcane circle is completely formed where it waits for a mental command it does not need to be maintained. Sjouren then has to aim each volley of 10 or 20 bolts in a general direction. Each volley drains a considerable amount of energy from him and he must wait another 30 seconds for him to use it again. He can use other spells in the interval wait period but doing so drains his energy even further once his energy is exhausted the circle shatters and can not be summoned again for at least another day. The circle takes the form of runic writing made out of a purple energy.


Circle of protection:

this glowing spherical circle is summoned instantaneously and covers the user and three nearby allies. It has just enough room for four people and is centered on the caster. it uses the casters tec score to block attacks any attack higher then the casters tec will break the shield also repeated attacks can break the shield given enough time. The shield takes all the casters concentration to maintain and is extremely taxing to keep up but is a reliable shield. The shield takes the form of glowing runic letters surrounding the caster and allies in a spherical circle.

Circle of Arcane Bolts: Looking better, but now there are some other difficulties to work through.
-- 40 seconds to use this move is going to leave it very difficult to use in a combat engagement, just to put that out there. It's likely you wouldn't really get a chance to use it very often at all, unless you had an ally to keep opponents distracted so you could prepare it.
-- It will need a definite number of bolts that are fired, 10 or 20 is a liiiiittle too vague.
-- Another question, that didn't occur to me before: what is the range on the bolts when they're fired?
-- 30 seconds between intervals of firing is also a bit...much. It would probably be a one-time use with a cooldown like that. just to point it out.
-- Just to throw this out there, but the whole needing to wait for a day to use it again isn't really necessary.
-- One more question: with the circle not needing to be maintained, can Sjouren move out of it and go elsewhere, or does he need to stay within the circle to make use of it?


Circle of Protection: Alright, let's have us a look-see here...
-- Such a large shield summoned instantaneously is going to be fairly weak right off, but with the constant concentration needed to maintain it that's somewhat offset.
-- It would actually be based on your DEF how well it can withstand attacks.
-- Just one last thing, what is the approximate size of the shield? Enough room for four people would probably be a few meters in radius, I would think, but just for clarity's sake so folks writing with you know what's up.