Grammar Nazism

[ADventuresVDO]

When I'm over here picking on your post for meaningless grammar issues (and also generally being a smart aleck), that just means I enjoyed it.  That being said, I just read "Dave>> Become Prime."

Within a few moments, the figure was gone, and Dace found himself at the Fountain of Infinity.

figure was gone, and Dace found himself at 

Dace





Then again, considering you said Dave quite a lot and that C is next to V on the keyboard, it makes sense.

[Jade Harley]

Excuse you, I am the only one who is supposed to point out Davemetri's typos! :frog:

[ADventuresVDO]

You know what, you're totally right, I shouldn't pick on Davemetrics.  So now I'm gonna dive into your iron-clad wall of text instead because I'm SUCH an egotistical, pretentious and hypocritical piece of smart aleck trash.

[spoiler]

"This long, impressively curled bug seemed to be doing barrel rolls in its jubilation as the robotic man worked."

Are these actual barrel rolls or aileron rolls?  Because I'm either seeing his mustache twirling around on his face, or detaching itself from his lip and dancing in vertical circles around his head.

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"Then, as a fire-seared and white-hot tong of metal was lifted into the air in the artificial, nerve-dead grasp of the armored senior citizen, something rippled quite alarmingly through the air."

How can you be nerve-dead if you never had nerves to begin with?  Why would you give a robot the feeling of pain, you monster?

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"After removing his hat, he was able to slide a finger all the way through the newly acquired abrasion with a peeved hmph."

But... isn't he a robot?  Why would he need to hmph?  It's a safari hat, it's mostly leather sans the metallic brim.  Is the hat itself made of metal or what?

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"He would have to forge a new hat, no doubt, and make it expressly resistant to foul beast juices!"

How do you forge a LEATHER hat?  Forging is for metal, sewing is a more appropriate term.  Again, is it a metal hat?  Am I going insane over a single hat?!

Yes.  Yes I am.

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"They were mysteriously empty, as if whoever had stood in them a few seconds before had spontaneously combusted. "

Whoever had stood in them a few seconds before had spontaneously combusted.  Oh wait, now it makes sense... it's one of those sentences that is really easy to read the wrong way.  AUGH

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"Breathing was a little rough on her throat and her nose immediately turned bright red, like a maraschino cherry."

Well whadaya know, Jade was secretly Santa the WHOOOOLE time!  She has her own towering toyshop, a red nose, a (potential) sled reindeer dog and all!

(seriouslythoughnevertakeanythingidoseriously)[/spoiler]

[Jade Harley]

L o l

[Mark]