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Favorite line that your character has said
#1
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A quote that your character has said that you just think is priceless for any reason! 

Mine amuses me because he doesn't know who superman is, and he's OP like the superhero. Also wears a cape.

Gildarts always sneezes when he enters tangled, and I found this quirk amusing. He is just told he has allergies.
Quote:]*though he was confused, "Allergies? Is that like kryptonite?"

While the quote is a bit of a stretch for him to say, because I'm not sure he thinks kryptonite is anything more than an expression, but I like the nature of the hilarity and think that it's funny to see his character be so confused when he encounters a little weakness

i also like to write how he can sneeze down trees. Where else but the OV can I have an opportunity to do that without it being a major disaster
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"I have never met a strong person with an easy past." -Atticus
#2
"...Bang."

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#3
When I had Gin fight Armstrong:

Quote:"EAT THIS YOU POLITICAL FUCK"
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"A waking dream of life and light."
#4
Not exactly "priceless," but I have a favorite for Ballad. Specifically two. One because I think it's awesome. Two because I think it's the epitome of cringe-inducing dialogue that should be used as an example of how NOT to write dialogue.

I like to think that I'm the master of mixed-bag dialogue for those reasons alone. I think I can write some genuinely good and gripping dialogue, while at the same time write absolute shit that any writer with any self-respect would get some brain bleach for. Oddly enough, both of them come from the same post.

First is, imho, my best piece of written dialogue for Ballad.

Quote:“I DID NOT KILL THEM!”

To me, this is my personal example as to how you could change someone's perception of a character using just a single sentence. So much said with so little words, and I think it perfectly encapsulates everything about Ballad pre-Gunsmith's Gamble.

Then there is horseshit.

Quote:
“Fucking bandits! This is what you're ALL GONNA GET, you hear me?! ALL OF YOU!”

I will not excuse myself from this. This is objectively shit. Not even the "so bad, it's good" kind of shit either. It's just bad. It's forced, it sounds really bad no matter what context it's in, and it sounds OOC as hell imo. It's just bad dialogue, and I don't know why I even thought it was acceptable. I hold this as the standard I hope to never lower myself to, and that's why it's also my other favorite. For how shitty it is. You can just smell the fecal matter on it, can't you? I know I can.

(I also don't like the coral joke I made in The Dead and the Damned. It also felt pretty forced and didn't make any sense at all coming from Sans.)
#5
Before she was a Prime, the bandit was just some secondary loser out in the sand, recovering from a bullet hole to the chest.
Quote:“You got to keep your scars, though, you know what I’m saying?” The bandit’s words, for once, sounded as though she was looking for something from the ears they fell on. They wanted to be heard and truly understood.

Her hand drifted to her blood-soaked garment, balling it up between her fingers. “You don’t wash the dirt out of your shirt. You don’t ever clean the blood away. You leave the bullet holes and only stitch something if the tear is so bad you can’t wear it anymore. You take your battles with you, because your battles are what make you.” She released her top and flipped her hair out of the way. “You battles are who you are, because your battles are what you survived.”


This part of Okor and my fight:
Quote:Shaking her head, she winced and staggered to her feet. “One day, the sun will fall from its string. The sky will shatter. The wind will blow away the last grain of sand. Everything ends. Everything dies. Even Primes.” She grinned to herself, even as the admittance fell from her lips, “Even me.”

Her sweaty palms curled into fists, and her bleary brown eyes met his. “Even you.”


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