Renegade Man on the Run/Jak Mar

[Jak Mar]

Character name: Jak Mar

Character source: Jak 2

Race: Humanoid

Gender: Male

Age: Seventeen

Personality: Jak Mar is a guy full of anger. Not only is he a angry man, his anger is directed toward Baron Praxis and Erol, the two that "personally" tortured him with Dark Eco for two years in prison. Now that Daxter had helped him escape the prison, Jak has a dark side which causes him pain, nightmares, and anger issues every day of his life. Jak is also reckless. He has a tendency to run into Krimzon guards, not caring what the consequences of his actions may be, he is living on his survival instincts. He is also shown to like racing and taking out metal heads with his weapons. He cannot control his dark form as well as he possibly could or would of wanted to. He is forced to traverse Haven City, a city that he is not used to. Jak doesn't tend to talk too much, he could be known as the "Man of few words". Piss him off and you'll have to deal with Dark Jak, and you don't want to deal with Jak's anger issues.


Character history:Throughout Jak's life, he grew up in a peaceful town named Sandover city and he had his friend daxter by his side. Samos, Jak's adopted uncle took care of them and he had a daughter named Keira. So there was this time Jak and Daxter decided to disobey Samos to go to Misty Island. Long story short, both of them crawled up to the dark eco hole and Jak tripped over something accidently pushing Daxter inside the dark eco. He popped out as a small ottsel and freaked out. So both of them begin the journey to find dark eco sages named Gol and Maia to change daxter back to normal. Throughout the game, you helped various characters do certain stuff for precursor orbs. As soon as Gol and Maia were defeated, there was no way to change Daxter back so he decided to stay small.

Jak gets propelled to the future 200 years later to run into a large technologically advanced city run by a tyrant named Baron Praxis. To make matters worse, a strange man named Erol and some guards came straight up to him and said they found him, only to drag him off to prison for two years.

Busting out of prison with Daxter's help, They run into a old man who needs their help and after Jak and Daxter help, he leads them to the Underground to meet Torn, who turns out to be a Ex-Krimzon guard who is the boss of the Underground. Jak is in the cause for something completely different then the Undergrounds main purpose but he wants revenge on the Baron anyway he can get it.

Jak has done lots of regrettable things that furthered his goals, but caused problems for everyone else.

Jak helps the Underground and meets the Shadow in the process later, meets Ashelin, Tess, Sig, Jinx, and Keira, and Erol himself.

Jak learns to control dark jak, meets a lot of others and gets his final revenge on Baron Praxis.



Stats:
ATK: 3
DEF:1
SPD:3
TEC: 3

Starting Proficiencies: Ranged Proficiency (Blaster- Gun) (1000 OM),
Physical Strength/Punching-Kicking etc)(1000 OM)
Lock on Proficiency(1200 OM)



Blaster- Jak's gun, that has a lock-on mod the gun that aims at target with perfect efficiency and accuracy . Weakness is that this gun cannot much damage. (300 OM)

Vulcan Fury- A machine gun-like gun that shoots like a barrel, comes with a lock on mod as well. Can shoot fast, and cause a lot of damage, but it doesn't always hit a target.(300 OM)

Peacemaker- A dark eco gun that shoots a medium ball of dark eco at the target. It can cause a lot of damage, but hard to aim, and shoots slow.(300 OM)




Starting Powers: Master acrobat(400)



Starting Moves:

Writing example:

(I wrote this)


Tick.. Tick... Tick. Time was passing slowly. There wasn't a second guess as to what was going on that day as Jak laid in the prison bed, tensing up when there was passing times and screaming coming from the middle of the Fortress. Time moved too slowly, Jak heard a door open, and there was Erol and two Krimzon guards standing outside the door. Jak frowned as the same thing happened day after day and he growled, struggling in the two guards grasps from the form he had inside of him.

Erol had come down to the chair before the two guards tried to fight off the struggling Jak turning Dark Jak. Today would not be a good day. Jak struggled in the chair as the two guards forced him on the chair and locked the two arm and leg restraints on the chair. Soon after, a large streak of dark eco went into Jak's body, forcing him to scream loud. He tried to fight the feeling of screaming, but it just kept coming up. Jak was laying there, his body looking up at the angry eyes of Erol as if the man was trying to get something from Jak's eyes. Jak wanted desperately to rip Erol to shreds, but it would have to wait.

Jak got unlocked from the restraints but this time he would attack the guards. Jak turned Dark Jak and the guards turned to run with tazers as Dark Jak hit one with his claws "ENOUGH,! CAN'T YOU SEE I HAD ENOUGH!"

They managed to knock Dark Jak down before he murdered three guards in cold blood. He changed back into Jak and was dragged roughly by the guards toward the cell. Not before a portal opened to a light world to the Omniverse sucked him in.

"Where the hell was he?!"

[Jak Mar]

Done... Finally

o____o

[Proto Man]

Athletic Speed isn't a power. Do you mean Super Speed (1200 OM)? Or perhaps Master Acrobat (400 OM)?

The only other thing is that you need Lock-on proficiency (1200 OM) if you want to have ranged attacks that will auto-hit. You have the OM to purchase this and still leave you with 1300 OM, which is enough for all your attacks, which I would all price at 300 OM. It's up to you if you want to reword your various guns or purchase the Lock-on proficiency. Other than that, everything else seems okay (the stats, the sample, the history).

[Jak Mar]

All fixed and ready.

[Omni]

Here's your roster sheet, if you could post it to a new topic in the rosters section entitled Jak Mar that'd be superb. Please also post a reply to that topic with your moves included (the rest of the profile you can fill in at your leisure). Good to finally have you on the roster!

Name: Jak Mar
Level: 1
Spent OM: 4500
Powers: (400) Master Acrobat (400)
Proficiencies: (3200) Physical Strength (1000), Ranged Proficiency (1000), Lock-On Proficiency (1200)
Moves: (900) Blaster (300), Vulcan Fury (300), Peacemaker (300)
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Base stats:
ATK: 3
DEF:1
SPD: 3
TEC: 3