Mock Fight: ShadeClaw vs Demetri

[Demetri Malius]

Okay, so ShadeClaw and I want to do a mock battle, for reason that she can better understand how fighting works, and also so I can train for colosseum. We would need a judge, as if it were a real fight, and it will probably take place in the Jankverse. The mock fight environment will be an open field of the forest of the Tangled Green. Standard rules.

[Miranda Frost]

hmmm demetri and shade are both going to be at the colliseum?

[Demetri Malius]

Demetri yeah, not sure about shadeclaw though, also known as Dawnika Snow

[Miranda Frost]

hmmm okies. -flies off to neighboring ooc thread-

[Dawnika Snow]

If dawnika can make it in time, she will most likely enter the colloseum.

[Yu Kanda]

I haven't judged on this forum before but i'd be willing to follow standard scoring cards and judge the fight. If you prefer a staff to judge, no hard feelings. Just offering ^^

[Roger Smith]

A mock fight, you say? Most interesting. Much like Yu, i have no experience, but i'd be up for offering to judge such a thing.

[Dawnika Snow]

Well we just need one judge. Hm, it will probably be Yu since they answered first.

[Demetri Malius]

Alright, so Yu is judging?

[Xehanort]

-is secretly lurking in the corner of the thread-

It would seem so. :omni:

[Yu Kanda]

Alright, so Yu is judging?

I will judge your Mock fight. Will use the standard judging score card which i will post here shortly.

If there are any special rules you wish to apply just let me know.

[Gamzee Makara]

Well, I dont mean to impose or hijack your post or anything, but I am planning on entering the Colosseum and have yet to be in a fight, so if anyone else would be interested in a mock fight as training or practice, I would love to try my hand at it. If anyone else would be up for that I mean.

[Xehanort]

you all should make it a... Threeway

[Yu Kanda]

Well, I dont mean to impose or hijack your post or anything, but I am planning on entering the Colosseum and have yet to be in a fight, so if anyone else would be interested in a mock fight as training or practice, I would love to try my hand at it. If anyone else would be up for that I mean.

I believe Alex was considering this aswell, you two should talk

[Gamzee Makara]

you all should make it a... Threeway

Oh I don't mean to butt into their fight or anything / . \

Oh, but there's an Idea Yu. I'll converse with him on that, thanks.

[Yu Kanda]

I have shamelessly copied this from Thaal, someone who's judging I've been reading up on. I consider him a fair and good judge, so I will try and follow his example. He uses the following scoring card and so shall I.

All you have to do is set up the word count per post, how many posts allowed per player, time span between posts etc etc.

Description and Clarity:
This section covers how effectively the writer created the world around the reader. Making sure that the reader can understand what is being described, using vivid or appropriate descriptions of items, events and people in the story and having good word choice all go into this section of the review. Note that using “purple prose” is not always effective, nor is consistently using flat, dry description. A writer that gets a good score in this section draws the reader into the world and allows them to see through the eyes of the character/narrator.

Voice:
No two writers write in the same style, nor should they. Even individual stories call for individual writing styles, a mood that creates a tinted lens through which the story is viewed. This is traditionally called the “voice” of the writer and it is a very important part of writing. A writer with a high score in this considers tone, pacing and including/disincluding detail throughout the entire story.

Character:
Character development, the actions and motivation of characters and dialogue are all important in this section. The goal is to create “round” characters as opposed to “flat” ones. Making the people in your writing seem real, not just archetypes following a plot progression is the goal here. The writer should consider who the people they are writing as are as individuals, why they take certain actions, their personal problems and boons, how they interact with the world around themselves and how they approach problems are all considerations for a writer in this section. Note that not all GOOD characters are LIKABLE characters. If you really hate a character that’s well written, this section deserves a good score!

Story:
Every body of creative writing, no matter how short or long, follows a storyline. How well the themes, events, messages and twists grab the reader is what makes the difference between a decent story and a great story. The writer must capture the reader’s attention hold it with the actions of characters and the world around them. This isn’t to say that a writing must be packed with action or intrigue, even something as simple as eating breakfast can be made into a great story. The presentation of events and how those events tie into the writer’s voice is what makes it good reading.

Grammar and Spelling:
This is the clerical work of the body of work. Spelling, punctuation, grammar and anything else that can be considered technical goes into this section. Generally every major grammatical error per 500 words moves this section down one grade.

[Sarah Kerrigan]

if someone wishes to do a mock fight and is looking for a partner, I would be willing to work with them.

[Demetri Malius]

-mock fight movement has been created-

[Dawnika Snow]

I started it all!! MUHAHAHAHAHA

[Demetri Malius]

:frog: FIGHT IS DONE AND READY TO BE JUDGED :frog:

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