Joining - Ian Sylvester

[Ian Sylvester]

Character name: Ian Sylvester

Character source: original

Character history: Imagine a 1900's swing artist was given a modern computer, now imagine that computer was taken away after he got to make some noise with it and was given music powers. he lived in a smallish city, more of a large town with large buildings really. magic in this world was next to non-existent and  technology was as it was in the 1900's, however he managed to get his hands on a modern laptop...curious device isn't it? anywho, he was able to make music with it so he enjoyed his time with it, until it broke as all cheep laptops nowadays do. then omni brought him here, to the omniverse, gave him awesome powers and dropped him at the fountain.

Physical Description: 6'3", lanky build, has brunette curly hair tucked under a black cabbie, he wears an equally black vest and tie over a white shirt, wears black dress pants that match the vest (originals only)

Stats
ATK 1
DEF 1
SPD 3
TEC 5

Starting Proficiencies: ranged Proficiency (1000) , Area defense (400), Remote Control Proficiency (600),

Starting Powers
basic telekinesis (400)
phasing (1200)

Starting Moves
illusionary electro swing(900) - Ranged, remote control, area defense, phasing


Ian, after taking five seconds to gather the necessary energy, summons up to a maximum of 10, 6 x 3 inch blades (based on his TEC stat where 1 point in TEC = 1 blade). These blades look like the neon outline of the shape provided in the spoiler below. Ian controls these blades using telekinesis and can move them around at a maximum speed of 15 feet per second (slightly faster then someone with 1 stat in SPD) and their maximum distance is 30 feet in diameter around himself. Ian can move around while utilizing his blades but only at a walking pace, fighting with these blades takes a lot of his concentration. If a blade happens to extend too far (past it's limit), it will disappear. If a blade is destroyed Ian can re-summon it. It takes one second to re-summon a blade. 

Alternatively, Ian can summon up to a maximum of five, 3ft x 3ft ,cubes (based on his TEC stat where 2 pints in TEC = 1 Cube). These cubes look like the neon outline of the color of my choice. Ian controls the use of these cubes using telekinesis and can move them at a speed of 5 feet per second. These cubes are only solid while they are completely still, moving these cubes around renders them partially transparent and incorporeal. Additionally, these cubes will not become solid while partially inside something (They will not become solid inside of a person/ object). Ian can stack these on top of each other to create a shield capable of protecting his whole body, though sufficient damage will destroy them, or a platform that he can walk on. If a cube is destroyed, Ian can re-summon it. Re-summoning a cube takes two seconds. Ian can move around while utilizing his cubes but only at a walking pace.[spoiler]

oh, and it's neater looking[/spoiler]

of course I can play songs without summoning anything, when I do this it's just rp fluff and doesn't do anything but make noise      

quick thanks to the peeps at the omniverse discord for helping me, and extra thanks to denial for translating my noobly written move into something acceptable


I confirm that I have read and agreed to the Rules of Conduct

Where did you find us
found you by wandering google, finding a site that listed rp sites, found you guys, and joined

I think thats everything, lemme know If I forgot somethin'

[Daniel]

History - Not enough. Since this is an original character, please give us, at least, a paragraph that details where they where and what they were doing at the time Omni pulled them to the Omnivverse.

Physical Description - Do you have a picture/drawing? if not that's fine but if you do, you should include it.

Illlusionary Electro Swing - You can only buff people with powers that you own. Since you don't have said powers, it's a no go.

Edit - This move also needs to be looked at carefully, it's not approved in any way.

[Ian Sylvester]

okay lets take this from the top

history - I will think of something, lets get this character balanced first

description - no I do not have a picture

electro swing - crap XD, at least it's better then the beta version, that one basically dumped my tech stat into everyone around me (it was way to op), I have honestly run out of Ideas for an AoE buffing move that puts emphisis on versatility and scaleablility .... well...can you help me think of a version of this that might work? I know it's not your job or anything to, but I've been working on that one move for 3 days and I'm out of ideas... all the previous versions weren't applicable either.... I planed on being a generall purpose bard really, that started off with a somewhat mediocre move that is good for general purpose things, but as he grows in power it becomes more and more useful...it also hast to fit the whole swing theme...very few options, and I've tried most of them

[Daniel]

If I help you write the move, how will you learn?

Honestly, my advice is swap it out for something else (like a sweet ass weapon or something, something to defend yourself with). Drop the move for a while and rewrite it after you've been around the site for a week or two.

But if you're absolutely set on this move, Then I'll have to deny it and ask you to rewrite it in a more cohesive and clear way. I've seen so many moves that I get the gist, but please rewrite it.

[Ian Sylvester]

yeah....pretty much revamped everything, let's take it from the top

added some to the history...it's really more on the world he comes from rather then him himself but I hope that's fine.

changed my starting proficiency, droped physicle, buffing, and area for ALL THE RANGED THINGS

I have telekinesis now, kinda fits with my new move

electro swing - took your advice, gave my self an actual damaging move...and a pseudo shield that has a little utility...pretty much dropped the support role in trade for more of a...what role is this? flanker? that one guy that has very little defense but a pretty good damage output so you want to deal with him quickly? meh, I should stop thinking of the omniverse in terms of roles.

[Daniel]

Illusionary Electro Swing - How do these blades/cubes appear? You need to have some sort of charge time to make these things appear.

Can he summon these objects if he is moving/ in the midst of battle? how long would that take?

What if some of these cubes/ blades are destroyed? can he re-summon them? How long would that take?

Stats (in terms of dealing damage) aren't a 1:1 ratio. Your weapons don't deal 1 damage if you have 1 ATK (please refer to the stats rules for more information).

Absolutely do not forget energy consumption/ fatigue. This would most definitely take some sort of energy to use. Please include how tiring this is for him to use (especially since he can remotely control these projectiles).

[Ian Sylvester]

hmm, I dunno whats a good time frame for this... a second? 5 seconds? a second for each object? can I have it to where I can split a cube into 2 blades and 2 blades into a cube and have it take less time? that would probs increase the cost though...I'm fine with that


as for the fatigue thing, for each action I take with these consumes a little bit of energy, however since I'm going to be Constantly summoning, moving, and unsummoning things in battle this adds up rather quick, during rather drawn out battles I might even pass out (I'll use dice rolls to determine if I pass out in longer battles, keeps it fair)

he can summon them in the middle of the fight and if they get broken, same amount of time as summoning from scratch (what would be a good way of determining their "health" so to speak)

they deal normal damage (I dunno why a felt the need to clarify the atk stat when that's the standard anyway)....and the stats page didn't really clarify anything...hmm....yeah that's all I can give you, the stats page doesn't clarify a damn thing, just that things that have charge ups do more damage... : /
I know this gonna make me sound incompetent but can you help me with this, I don't mind really low damage it's just that I dunno...and reading other peoples moves didn't help

[Daniel]

Illusionary Electro Swing (900) (Ranged, Area Attack, Area Shield, Remote Control, Phasing)

Ian, after taking five seconds to gather the necessary energy, summons up to a maximum of 10 blades (based on his TEC stat where 1 point in TEC = 1 blade). These blades look like [provide description of the actual blades here]. Ian controls these blades using telekinesis and can move them around at a maximum speed of [insert maximum speed here] and their maximum distance is 30 feet in diameter around himself. Ian can move around while utilising his blades but only at a walking pace, fighting with these blades takes a lot of his concentration. If a blade happens to extend too far (past it's limit), it will disappear. If a blade is destroyed Ian can re-summon it. It takes one second to re-summon a blade.

Alternatively, Ian can summon up to a maximum of five, 3ft x 3ft ,cubes (based on his TEC stat where 2 pints in TEC = 1 Cube). These cubes look like [provide description of the actual cubes here]. Ian controls the use of these cubes using telekinesis and can move them at a speed of 5 feet per second. These cubes are only solid while they are completely still, moving these cubes around renders them partially transparent and incorporeal. Additionally, these cubes will not become solid while partially inside something (They will not become solid inside of a person/ object). Ian can stack these on top of each other to create a shield capable of protecting his whole body, though sufficient damage will destroy them, or a platform that he can walk on. If a cube is destroyed, Ian can re-summon it. Re-summoning a cube takes two seconds. Ian can move around while utilising his cubes but only at a walking pace.

Note: You'll need phasing and Area Defense before being able to use the Cubes.

Price 900 - The variability in the amount of blades/ Cubes that can be summoned + the variability in the item that is summoned were added on to the base price of the move itself.

Added Area defense and Phasing - Area defense because, to cover your whole body, you'd need it, and phasing because I decided the cubes would need it.

I've left a couple of areas for you to fill in. This is ALL the help I will give you. From here on out, you'll need to learn on your own. Staff will deny any moves they cannot understand and I am only being lenient this time because I want you to get approved and learn fast.

Just remember to be concise with your move descriptions. You know what the move is supposed to do and look like, so you should convey that appropriately. You write move descriptions so that others can picture it and describe it in their writing. If we can't understand it on a basic level, at first glance, then we'll deny it and get you to re-write it.

[Ian Sylvester]

huh, why doesn't my reply appear in the thread...I mean you answered my questions anyway but still, weird.

thank you SOOO VERY MUCH (and I agree with the cube phasing))

I will now start editing my bio

[Daniel]

Your repllies only show up for staff until you are approved.

You aren't approved yet. Just bump again when you finish the move.

[Ian Sylvester]

ba-bump ba-bump ba-bump

I had to cut ranged materialize to stay in budget but I'm fine with summoning everything within 5 feet of me until I do get it

[Daniel]

Oh, one thing I did forget, how large are the blades?

[Ian Sylvester]

I've already said this, 6 inches (3 inches across)

[Daniel]

Name: Ian Sylvester
Spent OM: 4500
Proficiencies (2000); Ranged Proficiency (1000) , Area Defense (400), Remote Control Proficiency (600)
Powers (1600/8000); Telekinesis – Basic (400), Phasing (1200)
Moves (900); Illusionary Electro Swing (900)
Super Moves (0);
Transformations (0);
Assists (0);
Items (0);
Artefacts: None
Consumed OM (0); (for consumed items or OM permanently lost from respecs, etc)
Bases (0);
Unlocks (0);
Base stats:
ATK: 1
DEF: 1
SPD: 3
TEC: 5

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