Assault on Darkshire - Spearhead OOC

[Revan Noctis]

So.. we are like done now right.. I mean after Illidan writes once more I guess?

[Okor]

So.. we are like done now right.. I mean after Illidan writes once more I guess?

After Illidan posts, we are judged. After that, the winners (Or perhaps the losers) write a conclusion to the thread.

[Ezrihel]

All right. Could I get until around this time in two days? Right now it's 14/02 at 5:26pm, so up til 16/02 5:30pm? If it wasn't Valentine's Day today I'd be getting it done.

Yes yes yes! Extension approved my man.

[Illidan Stormrage]

Writing now. I'm assuming that Glyph Strike is a Tier 1 Super Attack, though there is no description in Revan's roster noting it as such, nor does the first page of his roster have it as a bought move.

[Revan Noctis]

Well yeh I mean I was pretty sure tier 1 was the only one I could have at the moment.
I could have sworn I bought it just before the battle though.
I will check. Certainly got it approved.

[Revan Noctis]

Yep here it is 

Current post count: 26 
Current Earned OM: 9598.13
Current Spent OM: 0
Buying: Communicator, Fire Blast, Glyph Strike 
Cost: 1100 OM
New Spent OM: 1100

[Illidan Stormrage]

You did buy it (it's in your log), but you haven't updated your roster page (the very first post) with your OM purchase.

[Revan Noctis]

You mean that first roster post? I'm supposed to update that too?

[Illidan Stormrage]

Yeah it's part of buying stuff, you're supposed to update it all, keeping track of your spent OM and what not.

Final post up, the judging can commence!

Also sorry forgot to quote the number of words, according to Word it's dead on 1000.

[Ezrihel]

Yep here it is 

Current post count: 26
Current Earned OM: 9598.13
Current Spent OM: 0
Buying: Communicator, Fire Blast, Glyph Strike
Cost: 1100 OM
New Spent OM: 1100

You mean that first roster post? I'm supposed to update that too?

Yes please. I'm pretty sure you were asked somewhere before to update your roster to include a bit of information about your character. Not updating your roster does nothing but inconvenience your opponents and judge who have to scour the forum for just the description of a move or assume vague things about your appearance/personality. It makes it a bit hard for others to  write for your character in threads and leads to you being included less in their posts (because I for one know that I would avoid trying to RP or PvP someone with an improper roster.)

FINAL RESULTS

[spoiler]

http://i.imgur.com/qxtbsJu.jpg(link)

Okor + Revan = 119.5(x1.3 Defenders Bonus) = 155.35
Illidan = 105(x1.5 Desperation Bonus) = 157.5

Congratulations Illidan, you've won, and managed to kill the other two- but! You're at death's door. You should probably seek some form of medical assistance soon.

Okay, so Revan: You really do need to work on communicating more with your fellow authors. I know that can be difficult because of time zones and what not, but that's why rounds last five days. Also, you super didn't count in the last round because it wasn't in your roster or properly linked in your purchases log(which is a violation of the rules, you need to link the post where staff approve the move). You uhm, also forgot to mention Illidan's T2 super with a 150 foot diameter that you would have had to deal with, hence you taking that much damage in the final round.

I am very glad that you've been picking up on the system thus far though! You have made some great progress since your first post. While this has been a rocky and uncertain fight I have noticed that you've been learning a good deal. Don't be afraid to ask for help/advice from other members in the community. You can get proof-reading assistance and advice on your posts during a fight, you just gotta ask.

You could have done with a bit more improvement on your scale. Revan didn't really feel super desperate or worried through out the fight with the exception of one line in your third post. I didn't feel compelled to believe that it was down to the wire, that Illidan's undead army was horrifying or that you maybe felt utterly repulsed by Okor and his decay and use of the dead as well. I just didn't get very much identity from your character.

You should strive to improve on writing out dealing damage and taking damage in your posts. If someone spends a paragraph attacking you, you should try to spend a paragraph attempting to dodge/block or counter-attack. You could do well to work on your realism while writing other's characters. I know it feels hella weird at first (the first PvP style I learned actively forbade ever writing someone else's character, so I know the feeling) but you should try to show someone's character in the most accurate light possible. I really doubt that Illidan would have charged right towards Revan's T1 attack, especially in his powered down and relatively calmer/more collected state. If you don't know how someone would response IC, just ask the writer of said character.

If anyone wants more in-depth critiques/reviews, feel free to add me on Skype (notika-anastasia-smith), Discord (Ezzy#1026) or PM me here.[/spoiler]

[Okor]

Doing the math, the defender's bonus would have allowed me to 1v1 Illidan by a comfortable margin.

REEEVVVVVAAAAAAAAAAAAANNNN

[Illidan Stormrage]

Geez thats damn close. Great fight guys, id probably like to coordinate with you for the death post so it comes off fitting and to peoples liking.

[Revan Noctis]

Writing somebody's character to me is god modding and I won't be doing that again.
I linked my purchases and deductions log it said nothing about having to link all of the approved moves threads from what I saw so idk what your saying there.

Illidan please just make it quick I have other places to be.

[Okor]

I linked my purchases and deductions log it said nothing about having to link all of the approved moves threads from what I saw so idk what your saying there.

Purchasing
To purchase things, use the following format:

Current post count: (your current post count, viewable below your avatar)
Current Earned OM: (your current Earned OM, viewable next to your posts)
Current Spent OM: (total, viewable on your roster)
Buying: (whatever it is you want to buy. If purchasing a move you MUST link to the approval). Cost: (the cost) OM
New Spent OM: (your total Spent OM after the purchase)

For Moves, Super Moves, and Power Ups, post a link to the approved version from the Move Approval Thread.

As long as you've made this post, you may now add the purchased item to your roster. You do not need an approval unless you are purchasing a Move, Summon, or Transformation. Don't forget to update your Spent OM, both for the particular category (or categories) the item you are buying is in, and the total. Staff members will only post in logs if administration is necessary, such as when a mistake has been made. Remember that all OM additions and deductions are permanently logged. We trust members not to abuse the self-updates system. If we think a member has been abusing the system, we will ban them. You have been warned!

[Revan Noctis]

No link it where?

[Okor]

No link it where?

http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?...281#pid281

Pinned in purchases and deductions, specifically labelled as "READ BEFORE POSTING".

[Revan Noctis]

Purchase Log: 

Put your purchase and deduction log's threadID number here. For example if the link to your log is http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=828, put '828' and nothing else.

Do you mean here? I do not understand 

[Ezrihel]

Writing somebody's character to me is god modding and I won't be doing that again.
I linked my purchases and deductions log it said nothing about having to link all of the approved moves threads from what I saw so idk what your saying there.

Illidan please just make it quick I have other places to be.

Okay, Revan. God Modding isn't just controlling someone's character. It's controlling someone's character and writing them in such a way to give yourself a noticeable advantage, making them do out of character things and generally having them have unrealistic reactions. You're going to have such a rough time in any sort of graded PvP on the site if you come at it with this sort of attitude. You signed up for this event knowing it would be PvP heavy. You should have studied other examples of PvP on the site.

Please, don't rush Illidan or give him attitude because he won and you died. You're not going anywhere for seven days seeing as you have to wait that long OOC before posting.


Also, click my purchases log as an example for where the move approval should be linked.

[Revan Noctis]

All I can say to that is that maybe your right but I still feel that way at the moment.
As for research yes I will do more of that I'm fine doing all that stuff. But yes I understand what you are saying here.

I was not rushing him or giving him attitude he asked what I wanted and I gave him an answer. On the contrary it is Okor that peeved me off originally by his attitude on Discord but that is not important now.

I did enjoy the fight with you Illidan sorry if that was received the wrong way.
Ultimately my reasons for joining this pvp match was not to achieve victory at all but to  join in and get a bit of experience. With that said next time I won't be going as easy as I did here.