Yusuke (Done)

[Haseo]

Character name: Yusuke Urameshi

Character source: Yu Yu Hakusho

Character history: (After the end of the series) It was the day he was and wasn't looking forward to, the day he would marry Keiko like he promised all those years ago. Almost a week before the event he said to her he would marry her for real this time but it seemed that would have to wait for a really really long time as he had some business in the demon realm again. As bad luck would have it the night he was supposed to travel to the demon world would happen he felt different in a way like he was somewhere else entirely. Was he still asleep? Did he even sleep at all? Where was this place? So many questions he couldn't even answer that is until he saw it for lack of a better term. This person or thing was sitting in what seemed like an endless void of darkness that Yusuke had been standing in for what seemed like forever. Before he could speak out the thing announced itself as Omni, wanting to say something sarcastic at this point he noticed he couldn't say anything at all but somehow this Omni person knew what questions he wanted to ask. Where was he? Who was this Omni and how could he get back? Omni seemed to only answer the first two questions but never said anything about the third one. So basically he was trapped here in this Omniverse and the only way to survive was to collect orbs of light called Omnilium? Again Yusuke wanted to say something sarcastic but instead just thought it. 'Wow what an ego this guy has naming everything about himself or is it itself? Meh who cares just let me out of here!' Suddenly he was transported to a blank like area, well white and devoid of any life is more like it so yeah blank. But in the front of the empty landscape lay a fountain bursting with water and color, something that would normally be unusual to people. "Jeez what a load that guy just told me." He said out loud now noticing he could talk again. "Ugh I guess the wedding is off." he sighed as he pressed on toward who knows where.

Physical Description:
 

Stats:
ATK: 3
DEF: 2
SPD: 2
TEC: 3

Starting Proficiencies: Physical Strength, Ranged Proficiency:  2000 OM

Starting Powers: Enhanced Senses Basic, Master Acrobat, Super Jumping Basic:: 2100 OM

Starting Moves:

Spirit Gun, 900 OM (requires Ranged Proficiency): A light blue beam made from spirit energy that is fired from the forefinger at the target. Once fired it travels at the speed of a bullet and can be charged for greater power. Takes half a second to charge the move normally without need to charge it anymore. The user has to remain stationary to charge it further than the normal time to charge. Charging this move any further can go up to 10 seconds for a much more powerful attack. Once fired it will travel until it hits the target or hits a object such as a tree or wall in which case the beam stops and fades away after use. Damage taken from this beam is normally minor in damage but when charged for 5 seconds it as at moderate, when charged for the maximum of 10 seconds it is at serious. Can be fired to 12 shots maximum before it takes 10 seconds to recharge and use again, charged shots take 20 seconds to recharge. Cannot fire more than one charged shot at a time but normal shots can be fired one after the other. This attack does not have homing and cannot be controlled by the user for different directions upon firing.

I confirm that I have read and agreed to the Rules of Conduct. Yes.

Where did you find us?: Been here before.

[Daniel]

History - please be more clear and concise with which point in time you're pulling the character from.

You are missing your character's physical description, please refer to This for further formatting.

Profs/ Powers - Master Acrobat and Super Jumping are powers, not proficiencies.

Spirit Gun - Is the 20 second charge time the same as combining all three shots into one larger, stronger, shot? or are they separate?

"Can be fired up to three times before it takes ten minutes to recharge and use again" That seems way too unforgiving, especially for a move I assume you'll want to be able to rely on a lot. To put it in perspective, a fight with another player may not even last 10 in character minutes, so you'd use this up and then be forced to fight bare handed (this goes for the 20 minute recharge time as well).

Why are you limiting yourself to 3 shots? is that what it is in the Anime? I haven't seen it so I wouldn't know.

Overall, I think you tried too hard to balance the move.

[Haseo]

History - please be more clear and concise with which point in time you're pulling the character from.

"He's from the end of the series."

You are missing your character's physical description, please refer to This for further formatting.

"In the app it said (originals only) and this is a canon character."

Profs/ Powers - Master Acrobat and Super Jumping are powers, not proficiencies. 

"My mistake"

Spirit Gun - Is the 20 second charge time the same as combining all three shots into one larger, stronger, shot? or are they separate?

"Can be fired up to three times before it takes ten minutes to recharge and use again" That seems way too unforgiving, especially for a move I assume you'll want to be able to rely on a lot. To put it in perspective, a fight with another player may not even last 10 in character minutes, so you'd use this up and then be forced to fight bare handed (this goes for the 20 minute recharge time as well).

Why are you limiting yourself to 3 shots? is that what it is in the Anime? I haven't seen it so I wouldn't know. 

"In the beginning of the anime he only had 1 shot but at the end he didn't have a limit. I was confused to what i should set it as since in the rules it said my character starts off not that strong."

Overall, I think you tried too hard to balance the move.

"I did what i thought would work."

[Daniel]

Note: You should just edit all the new information into the original app (maybe make it bold as well, so I can find it easily).

History - okay

Physical Description - I know what it says. That mostly refers to the part where you have to write a detailed physical description of your Original character. For canon characters it is always common courtesy to put an image of your character.

Spirit Gun - Is the 20 second charge time the same as combining all three shots into one larger, stronger, shot? or are they separate?

You honestly don't need to limit yourself to only 3 shots. The cooldowns are still too high.

please make all the changes I've asked you to.

[Haseo]

Okay i think that should do it for the changes.

[Daniel]

Spirit Gun - Again, the 5 minute recharge time is way too long, if you really want a recharge time then I'd say anywhere between 10 - 30 seconds would be more appropriate.

Remove the part where you say "Can be redirected however from things like a mirror or crystal." as this would all depend on whether your opponent is using a move to deflect your move or has enough TEC to do so.

I don't really understand why you're limiting yourself with this move. The normal shots from this could be like firing a weapon and you could limit yourself to a sort of "clip size" which, after being expended, would need to be reloaded by taking a couple of seconds to gain more energy, then you could have the more intensive charged modes (which could cause him to have longer charge times.

If you want to keep the move as is (with the changes I've asked for) then that's fine, but if you'd like help writing it up, then shoot me a PM.

[Haseo]

Okay i think i got it right this time.

[Daniel]

"Can be fired up to 10 times before it takes 5 to 15 seconds to recharge" Instead of just putting this there, can you put the individual charge times for each different mode? also, can they all be fired a maximum of 10 times before Yusuke needs to recharge?

[Haseo]

does this work?

[Daniel]

Alright, so he can fire the normal shots 12 times before he has to recharge, but what about the charged variants of the move?

[Haseo]

what about now?

[Daniel]

You are approved

Name: Yusuke
Spent OM: 5000
Proficiencies (2000); Physical Strength (1000), Ranged Proficiency (1000)
Powers (2100/8000); Enhanced Senses – Basic (1400), Master Acrobat (400), Super Jumping – Basic (300)
Moves (900); Spirit Gun (900)
Super Moves (0);
Transformations (0);
Assists (0);
Items (0);
Artefacts: None
Consumed OM (0); (for consumed items or OM permanently lost from respecs, etc)
Bases (0);
Unlocks (0);
Base stats:
ATK: 3
DEF: 2
SPD: 2
TEC: 3

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