Move Creation Workshop

[James Knight]

NFL Laser - 300 OM, Ranged Proficiency. 
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The NFL-Laser takes about ten seconds for Warren to generate it,  by itself without a power pack. To generate a power pack for the blaster, which allows for ten shots,  takes another 5 seconds for him. Replacing the gun takes him about 7 seconds, and replacing a power pack, about 4 seconds.  The damage level it does is dependent on the TEC and ATK of Warren versus the DEF of his opponent. The range is 75 feet from him in any direction. The gun can be used while moving, and only needs one of his hands to do. The move itself is moderately taxing on his stamina, akin to a light work out. After shooting all ten shots out of the blaster, the NFL-Laser will need about 6 seconds for it to cool down before he can replace the power packs. Due to the low rate of Fire, about one shot every 3 seconds by this pistol, it can do high amounts of damage to anyone, or any object that it hits.

The NFL-Laser was modified after a Blaster Pistol by Warren Zimmer, but has his own tweaks. The beam of energy it fires is colored purple.

[Dane Regan]

NFL Laser - 300 OM, Ranged Proficiency. 
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The NFL-Laser takes about ten seconds for Warren to generate it,  by itself without a power pack. To generate a power pack for the blaster, which allows for ten shots,  takes another 5 seconds for him. Replacing the gun takes him about 7 seconds, and replacing a power pack, about 4 seconds.  The damage level it does is dependent on the TEC and ATK of Warren versus the DEF of his opponent. The range is 75 feet from him in any direction. The gun can be used while moving, and only needs one of his hands to do. The move itself is moderately taxing on his stamina, akin to a light work out. After shooting all ten shots out of the blaster, the NFL-Laser will need about 6 seconds for it to cool down before he can replace the power packs. Due to the low rate of Fire, about one shot every 3 seconds by this pistol, it can do high amounts of damage to anyone, or any object that it hits.

The NFL-Laser was modified after a Blaster Pistol by Warren Zimmer, but has his own tweaks. The beam of energy it fires is colored purple.

Damage is always based on ATK only. High TEC does not allow you to make an attack do more damage.

You have a lot of time constraints here. Most of which you don't really need. Sure, it'll make the gun strong, but this move would still do pretty good damage with 5 seconds to make a gun (which comes with ammo), and 5 seconds to recharge. Right now, you'll find this laser pistol really hard to use in combat. Also, do the lasers travel at bullet speed? Or at some other speed?

[James Knight]

Bullet speed, but would you please help me revise it to properly fit? 

[Dane Regan]

NFL Laser - 300 OM, Ranged Proficiency. 
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The NFL-Laser takes about five seconds for Warren to generate it. It can fire ten lasers, each moving at the speed of a bullet, before needing to be recharged. Recharging the gun takes him about 5 seconds, and will grant another 10 shots. The range is 75 feet from him in any direction. The gun can be used while moving, and only needs one of his hands to do. Creating and charging the gun is moderately taxing on his stamina, akin to a light work out. Due to the low rate of Fire, about one shot every 3 seconds by this pistol, it can do high amounts of damage to anyone, or any object that it hits.

The NFL-Laser was modified after a Blaster Pistol by Warren Zimmer, but has his own tweaks. The beam of energy it fires is colored purple, about a cenitmetre thick, and dissipates as soon as it hits something.

This should do. It's more simplistic than what you had before, and has the info you need.

[James Knight]

NFL Laser - Fire Blast (300, Ranged Prof, Debuff): 

A red laser that shoots out of the NFL- Laser. This travels at the speed of an arrow. The blast takes about 8 seconds to charge up. This leaves a burn mark that is agonizingly painful on the hand of the individual who is hit by it, causing them to be unable to concentrate on melee attacks. The burn mark will not disappear unless they either spend some time on a healing move, or have a healing prof, or 15 seconds pass. 

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[Marcus Wright]

Air Support- In a way, Marcus is able to call and rely on his girlfriend, Blair Williams, a known pilot in the Resistance and one of the pilots of the Avengers. When she is called upon, she pounds the enemy with upcoming bullet rain.

[Is there a way you could do a tag-team move like this?]

[Dane Regan]

Air Support- In a way, Marcus is able to call and rely on his girlfriend, Blair Williams, a known pilot in the Resistance and one of the pilots of the Avengers. When she is called upon, she pounds the enemy with upcoming bullet rain.

[Is there a way you could do a tag-team move like this?]

You can have super attacks that call in an ally to execute a strong attack. Alternatively, you could just get an assist and buy some moves for them to use.

NFL Laser - Fire Blast (300, Ranged Prof, Debuff): 

A red laser that shoots out of the NFL- Laser. This travels at the speed of an arrow. The blast takes about 8 seconds to charge up. This leaves a burn mark that is agonizingly painful on the hand of the individual who is hit by it, causing them to be unable to concentrate effectively on moves and powers, particularly for primes with a lower TEC than Warren. The burn mark will disappear once 15 seconds pass. Hitting someone twice will remove the previous burn mark and apply a new one.

I changed the bolded areas to remove unnecessary parts, added a bit about TEC, and added how it deals with stacking. This should be good, but you can change any adjustments I made you don't like.

[Marcus Wright]

Air Support- Tier 2 Super Move- 800 OM (Requires Flight and Area attack) , Marcus is able to call and rely on his girlfriend, Blair Williams, a known pilot in the Resistance and one of the pilots of the Avengers. When she is called upon, she pounds the enemy with the Quinjet's upcoming armor piercing bullet rain strikes as she goes by.

[James Knight]

Here are some more moves I'm working on for an NPC Prime. 

Repaying the Boss (300, Insight, Mimic, Buff.): 

Jason is capable of transferring any moves that he has seen and replicated to Warren, should Warren spend the requisite OM to purchase the move permanently. Otherwise, he is capable of sharing a temporary copy of the move to Warren. This makes him sick, and could cause him to die if he pushes the ability too hard. In addition he can only transfer 2 moves that he has mimicked. This also allows him to keep any moves he has mimicked as long as the person he has mimicked the move from is within his general vicinity, IE in the same verse as him. This takes him 12 seconds. This also allows him to loan Proficiencies of his own to Warren, should he need to do so, or powers. 


Hand Guns (600, Ranged Proficiency, Physical Strength): 

A set of hand guns that was made by Warren Zimmer for Jason. These pistols have unlimited ammunition, but relatively low attack power because of the unlimited ammunition. The pistols can be used to pistol whip an opponent, or to shoot them. The pistols take him about 5 seconds to materialize and put to use. The pistols can also be recalled to his hands should he lose access to them.

[James Knight]

And here are some moves for Warren: 

Energy Wazikashi (300, Physical Strength): 

After visiting the Sulaco and learning of the existence of the Dark Saber, the Energy Wazikashi was an attempt by Warren Zimmer to replicate it but without need for the Force, or any other abilities of that nature. The sword has an 18 inch blade. The sword is purple, and gray in color. It's blade is made out of energy and can clash with most lightsabers or other similar swords. 



Cyberblade Virus (300, Physical Strength): 

The Cyberblade Virus was made after his visit to the Sulaco. The blade has an 18 inch long blade. Like the Energy Wazikashi this has a blade of energy. Ideally this is made for dual wielding with the Energy Wazikashi so that Warren can doubly attack his opponents. Manifesting the weapon takes about seven seconds for Warren to do so. The Cyberblade Virus is one that Warren can also use single handedly. 



Great Sword Glitch (300,  Physical Strength): 

The third of the blades modeled after the Dark Saber when he left the Sucalo. While this may share many of the properties of a Lightsaber, this is not in all actuality one because it does not possess the powers a Lightsaber would when used by someone who has the Force. This sword may be able to clash with some blades, but against a truly skilled warrior this would be useless. Has a 30 inch blade, and a heavy handle. The blade is colored purple and is made out of energy like the others. 


Blade Circle (300, Physical Strength): 

Blade Circle is an attack Warren can do when he has either sword in hand, or a melee weapon. This is a spinning attack he can do that will damage opponents who get within 4-10 feet of him with either blade. This is moderately powerful, and cannot be used with other moves. It can be interrupted to use other moves however. Blade Circle is a spinning attack that lasts for 7 seconds, and has a 10 second cool down. 

Parry (300, Area Defense): 

Parry is a move that takes Warren about 2 seconds to activate. When activated he can negate one non-super move of the same Tier as he is, provided he is able to successfully know what the move is, and see it coming. This makes him unable to use Blade Circle, or either sword for 10 seconds.

Code: Cancel (300, Area Defense, Debuff.): 

Code: Cancel is an app that Warren can run via his NFL-R. For 15 feet around him, this nullifies any energies other than those of weapons like blasters or guns, or swords. What this means is that a person throwing fireballs, or lightning, or ice at him? The move would instantly be negated. Lasts 10 seconds, requires both hands, can't be used with other moves, can't be used while moving. Using any moves interrupts this. Takes 15 seconds to charge up Code: Cancel.

[Jak Mar]

T2SA- Flash Freeze- Light Jak (800 OM)

For a maximum of 30 seconds, Jak in his Light form is able to freeze a enemy in place by appearing to clap his hands above his head, allowing him safe passage while his enemy is slowed down temporarily.

[Dane Regan]

Here are some more moves I'm working on for an NPC Prime. 
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Repaying the Boss (300, Insight, Mimic, Buff.): 

Jason is capable of transferring any moves that he has seen and replicated to Warren, should Warren spend the requisite OM to purchase the move permanently. Otherwise, he is capable of sharing a temporary copy of the move to Warren. This makes him sick, and could cause him to die if he pushes the ability too hard. In addition he can only transfer 2 moves that he has mimicked. This also allows him to keep any moves he has mimicked as long as the person he has mimicked the move from is within his general vicinity, IE in the same verse as him. This takes him 12 seconds. This also allows him to loan Proficiencies of his own to Warren, should he need to do so, or powers. 


Hand Guns (600, Ranged Proficiency, Physical Strength): 

A set of hand guns that was made by Warren Zimmer for Jason. These pistols have unlimited ammunition, but relatively low attack power because of the unlimited ammunition. The pistols can be used to pistol whip an opponent, or to shoot them. The pistols take him about 5 seconds to materialize and put to use. The pistols can also be recalled to his hands should he lose access to them.[/spoiler]

Repaying the Boss: I suggest you use the spoilered move below as a basis for what drawbacks I'd expect. Just copy paste them over and write up the rest in your own words. It was one of All Might's NPC's moves, but he's not active anymore so I guess you can rip it off (the only version I have on hand is Serraph's version of it though). Also, this sounds like you're using an NPC purely for your character's benefit. NPCs are for writing your story. They're not a character to create to artificially increase your character's strength.
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All For One - 300 OM - Buff, Mimic

Serraph may "teach" a single move he knows to someone else via three seconds of physical contact. This includes any move he has learned from Mimic. Anyone he teaches will only have access to the move for a half-hour in character. If the hour-limit on a Mimicked move runs out, anyone he has taught the copied move will also no longer be able to use it. 

If the person he is teaching doesn't have the required proficiency or powers to learn the move, they will temporarily gain them in relation to the move, and the move alone. If he teaches a move that requires "Flight" they will be able to fly only when actively using the taught move. He can only give one move per person. If someone is already using a move that was given to them by All For One, and Serraph uses All For One on them again, the first move will be erased from that person and replaced with the new move. 

It is only really comfortable or safe to use All For One once every half-hour, but he is able to use it more often than that. When he performs All For One, he feels sick. Performing it in rapid succession will have the effect of making this feeling of sickness increase, after five uses within ten minutes, he will become dizzy and unable to walk. If he uses it ten times within ten minutes he will become physically ill, prone to spitting up blood, and intensely dizzy, unable to move. Using it twenty times within ten minutes will cause him to lose consciousness for at least eight hours, or if already wounded, die.[/spoiler]

Hand Guns: How long do they take to recall?

And here are some moves for Warren: 
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Energy Wazikashi (300, Physical Strength): 

After visiting the Sulaco and learning of the existence of the Dark Saber, the Energy Wazikashi was an attempt by Warren Zimmer to replicate it but without need for the Force, or any other abilities of that nature. The sword has an 18 inch blade. The sword is purple, and gray in color. It's blade is made out of energy and can clash with most lightsabers or other similar swords. 



Cyberblade Virus (300, Physical Strength): 

The Cyberblade Virus was made after his visit to the Sulaco. The blade has an 18 inch long blade. Like the Energy Wazikashi this has a blade of energy. Ideally this is made for dual wielding with the Energy Wazikashi so that Warren can doubly attack his opponents. Manifesting the weapon takes about seven seconds for Warren to do so. The Cyberblade Virus is one that Warren can also use single handedly. 



Great Sword Glitch (300,  Physical Strength): 

The third of the blades modeled after the Dark Saber when he left the Sucalo. While this may share many of the properties of a Lightsaber, this is not in all actuality one because it does not possess the powers a Lightsaber would when used by someone who has the Force. This sword may be able to clash with some blades, but against a truly skilled warrior this would be useless. Has a 30 inch blade, and a heavy handle. The blade is colored purple and is made out of energy like the others. 


Blade Circle (300, Physical Strength): 

Blade Circle is an attack Warren can do when he has either sword in hand, or a melee weapon. This is a spinning attack he can do that will damage opponents who get within 4-10 feet of him with either blade. This is moderately powerful, and cannot be used with other moves. It can be interrupted to use other moves however. Blade Circle is a spinning attack that lasts for 7 seconds, and has a 10 second cool down. 

Parry (300, Area Defense): 

Parry is a move that takes Warren about 2 seconds to activate. When activated he can negate one non-super move of the same Tier as he is, provided he is able to successfully know what the move is, and see it coming. This makes him unable to use Blade Circle, or either sword for 10 seconds.

Code: Cancel (300, Area Defense, Debuff.): 

Code: Cancel is an app that Warren can run via his NFL-R. For 15 feet around him, this nullifies any energies other than those of weapons like blasters or guns, or swords. What this means is that a person throwing fireballs, or lightning, or ice at him? The move would instantly be negated. Lasts 10 seconds, requires both hands, can't be used with other moves, can't be used while moving. Using any moves interrupts this. Takes 15 seconds to charge up Code: Cancel.[/spoiler]

Energy Wazikashi/Cyberblade Virus: These are literally the same move. Just get one move that's called "Energy Wazikashi and Cyberblade Virus" for 300 OM that gives you both swords as weapons, since they're identical outside of cosmetics.

Great Sword Glitch: This is fine.

Blade Circle: You'll need to be more specific. Does Warren spin around? Run in a circle? Spin his swords around? It's not clear.

Parry/Cancel: No. You can't just "nullify" attacks. You can make a shield to block them or try to physically parry or avoid them. But you need a description. You need a how. How does Warren block/avoid the attacks in these moves? I suggest you look at some other shield moves.

T2SA- Flash Freeze- Light Jak (800 OM)

For a maximum of 30 seconds, Jak in his Light form is able to freeze a enemy in place by appearing to clap his hands above his head, allowing him safe passage while his enemy is slowed down temporarily.

Do you just want to freeze one enemy? Sure. Something like this would work:

T1SU - Flash Freeze - Light Jak (600 OM) (Debuff, Ranged, Homing)

Jak in his Light form is able to freeze a enemy in place by focusing on them for a couple of seconds, then appearing to clap his hands above his head, allowing him safe passage while his enemy is stopped temporarily. This effect lasts 40 seconds. A frozen enemy cannot be targetted or harmed by any means. This can be blocked by a T1 super defence.

Note that choosing to restrict this move to when you're using a specific powerup won't make it stronger in any way.

[James Knight]

Repaying The Boss (300 OM, Buff, Mimic, Insight.): 

Repaying the Boss is a Technique Jason has because of his perfect muscle memory, and skill at replicating the attacks that others are capable of performing. In short, what this allows him to do is pay back his boss for bringing him to the Omniverse, by bestowing him with the techniques, or moves that he has seen others perform. If a person he is doing this to does not have the required capabilities (Profs, or Powers) to perform a move or use a weapon, then for that move alone they would receive them temporarily in relation to the move. However, he can only do two moves this way at a time for a single individual including his boss. It isn’t really comfortable to use it more than once every half hour, but Jason can use it more than that. When he performs said move he feels nausea. Prolonged use of it in a short amount of time could cause vertigo, unconsciousness, and if he spammed use of it when injured, it would kill him, or cause him to lose consciousness. Repaying the Boss can be used with other moves, so long as he has one hand free. This also allows Jason to grant Secondaries moves of their own, temporarily. 

Great Sword Glitch (300,  Physical Strength): 

The third of the blades modeled after the Dark Saber when he left the Sucalo. While this may share many of the properties of a Lightsaber, this is not in all actuality one because it does not possess the powers a Lightsaber would when used by someone who has the Force. This sword may be able to clash with some blades, but against a truly skilled warrior this would be useless. Has a 30 inch blade, and a heavy handle. The blade is colored purple and is made out of energy like the others. 


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[Jak Mar]

T2SU - Flash Freeze - Light Jak (600 OM) (Debuff, Ranged, Homing)

Jak in his Light form is able to freeze a enemy in place by focusing on them for a couple of seconds, then appearing to clap his hands above his head, allowing him safe passage while his enemy is stopped temporarily. This effect lasts 40 seconds. A frozen enemy cannot be targetted or harmed by any means. This can be blocked by a T1 super defence.

Meant to make that a T2 Super Utility

[Dane Regan]

T2SU - Flash Freeze - Light Jak (600 OM) (Debuff, Ranged, Homing)

Jak in his Light form is able to freeze a enemy in place by focusing on them for a couple of seconds, then appearing to clap his hands above his head, allowing him safe passage while his enemy is stopped temporarily. This effect lasts 40 seconds. A frozen enemy cannot be targetted or harmed by any means. This can be blocked by a T1 super defence.

Meant to make that a T2 Super Utility

This is about the strength of a T1 utility. It doesn't need to be a T2.

[Jack Darby]

Can someone help me rewrite this to not need Superspeed please?

Chaos Breaker (300, Superspeed, Physical Strength)
Unicron punches forward with enough speed and force that the impact creates an explosive shockwave. When punching an object, such as the ground, or a wall, cracks will first radiate from his punch, and then explode outwards, destroying about everything within five feet of the impact point, most intensely directly in front of his fist, and the force dissipating as it gets further away. When simply punching liquid, there will be a huge dip in the water at the point of impact, and two seconds later the water will rush back with explosive force to refill the hole. When punching air, the shockwave takes the form of a massive rush of air-pressure, blowing away anything that weighs less than two hundred pounds for five feet around his fist.

The air-pressure wave takes on the general form of an egg-shape, extending five feet from his fist, with the narrowest point coming from his fist and getting wider as the shockwave continues.

The actual destructive effect is less than that of a bomb, but significantly more than a regular punch.

Pulling his fist back takes about a second, but the punch itself is augmented with super speed, his fist shooting forwards in an instant. However, it takes about three seconds for the shockwave to reach its full size and another two seconds for the destructive power to dissipate. Doing the punch leaves a strain on his arm, and so he will need about a minute of rest for each arm before he attempts it again.

Using both arms at once has about the same effect as using just one arm, except there will be two points of highest destructive power rather than just one.

The punch is somewhat exhausting to use multiple times in a row, and he will need an hour recovery time after using CHAOS BREAKER five times in close succession.

In order to use the move to its full effect, he must concentrate briefly, and be standing still. If he's attempting a CHAOS BREAER, but he is distracted or moved suddenly, he will simply do a regular punch, having lost concentration.

He is able to do two Chaos Breakers at once, but he is unable to use any other type of move, due to the focus on the precise way he's using his powers. Chaos Breaker was inspired by the show “My Hero Academica” and one of the techniques of All Might from the memories of Rafael. Unicron created this move to give him a powerful unarmed attack he could use to take down most of his opponents.

It should be noted that when he is using this move, there is purple electricity crackling across his body - a dead give away of what he is about to do to his opponent. This is severely taxing on both Rafael, and Unicron to use. So, he can only use this move about every 35 seconds, at maximum.

[Trixie]

Do you mean Burst Movement?

[Jack Darby]

Trying to make it only require Physical Strength, before I submit it for reapproval.

[Jak Mar]

Demonic Torture- (T2 Dark Jak, Claws, )??? Not sure of the cost yet)

When Jak is away, the Demon in him is allowed to play.

Play that is with his enemies.

Jak's demonic form is a lot bloodier in this form.

Not only has his horns grown, his hunger for blood grows with it.

He stares into a enemies eyes with a creepy evil grin, and grabs them (if close enough) and slams them on the ground constantly, until he pins them on the ground for about 30 seconds and scrapes his claws against any part of the unlucky victim's body until either the enemy pushes them off or Dark Jak runs out.

[Handsome Jack]

That looks like fodder to me. Everything in that Move are things you can do with Physical Strength. That said, like all Moves or otherwise, it needs to be avoidable and damage will be dependent on the target's Def.