Critique the King of Knights! (Please?)

[Artoria Pendragon]

I wish ye who stumbled here to critique my writing, please!
Jab me, stab me, rip me to shreds.
Tell me what you like, what you don't, what you love, what you hate.
Be as vocal, or as unvocal as you want, I'll take anything in stride, be it rude, crude or prude!

Here be ze first thread, up for critique:
Of Knights and Kingdoms

I'll be posting my threads into this one in the future, in the hopes that someone might take a gander and throw a rose or a rock my way, either way.

Thank you in advance, you magnificent creatures.

[James Knight]

A very well written series of posts. Expertly designed, and beautifully written. Truly I can find no flaw with them. I wish I was as good as you when it comes to writing, King of Knights.