MOCK FIGHT - OOC: Black Ash vs Everyone Else

[Ash]

Previously Discussed Details:

Set-Up
-Desman Black & Ash the Storm Demon vs Aquamarine vs Revan Noctis vs Ebonywood Hellscythe 

Posting Order
-Ash, Aquamarine, Revan, Desman, Ebony

Post Count: 2
Word Limit: 1250

Judge
Jade Harley

[Jade Harley]

I am volunteering to judge this! Did you guys have Random Elements or the Damage Counter on for this?

[Ash]

Well.. Since me and Des are fusing... Elements on please.


Damage counter: I wouldn't mind this, anyone against it?

[Revan Noctis]

Maybe elements should be off.

[Ash]

that is not up for discussion xD

[Ebonywood Hellscythe]

Naaahh. Random makes it more fun!

(Says the Wild Elemental Mage of Darkness)

[Aquamarine]

Yeah I agree with Ebonywood on this one.

[Revan Noctis]

All the members of my team think it should be discussed.

[Desman Black]

I mean, your one team is the only one that thinks that we souldn't have random elements... so majority rules?

[Revan Noctis]

I never agreed to the majority rules rule.

[Revan Noctis]

Let the fight begin.

[Ash]

So I realized we also forgot to discuss the time limit to these posts, but I don't think anyone will be sad about 48 hours.


But for every sprinkle I find I will lower the hour down by one. ._.



IM GOING TO POST NOW!!

[Ash]

I switched Des an Revan in the posting order, now that there are five of us.

[Ebonywood Hellscythe]

Some comments about Ebony's next actions (or if you think something else would be more interesting, go for it - this isn't canon):
>She's probably going to assume Black Ash was mostly aiming for Aqua and some blasts happened to go near her (since she was able to dodge, which she's not great at).
>Aqua attacked her and fired a shot (blinding ball) at her for seemingly no reason. (OOC: I don't care. Fights are fun and I love it - it's all good fun; but IC, while Ebony doesn't hold grudges or generally get angry, Aqua basically made herself Eb's primary target should she do any fighting)
>It's probably going to hit Ebony.

So, it wouldn't be hard to convince Ebony that Aqua is actually the bad guy here (or maybe she'll even convince herself that). I don't mind whether you write her full angst or slightly confident.

Also, IC reason for Eb to be there is obviously the statues. Some probably look really cool.

[Ash]

Reading the CBox, I decided to answer some questions I saw:

Black Ash Gender: She or They are fine, =3 Thanks for considering it.
@Des: =3 Actually I created Black Ash with Desman as armor, just not in traditionally. Her synthetic skin is reinforced by your DEF, and its 'paint job' is inspirted by his color scheme, just a little different. She is definately the dominate body in the fusion, if only because she has more experience in combat., but you are definately the armor here.
Also @ Des: 17 Attacks!?! Hawt!!
And yes. Black Ash is willing to use all of them. Modern, old fashion, long range, melee, debuffing, and even magic are normal things for Ash. So being able to use your attacks against you will just please her all the more. Feel free to write Ash using your own or someone else's moves. (including her's or Desman's)

@Aqua: My idea was that you were stalking them, and I apologize if that didn't fit with the character's actions. I blame myself for not asking these questions when you were around. Good job flipping it to your advantage though.

@Ebony: I guess this can dessolve into something more like Black Ash vs Aquamarine, vs Ebony and Revan? xD Also i am happy she likes my statues.

Other Things of Note:
>Upon hearing the little officer warn them that she is part of Coruscant, Aquamarine becomes primary target to Black Ash due to Ash's desire to rack up that bounty.

[Ash]

and with that epic post, with its epically close timing xD

we are done.


take it away Jade~!!

[Jade Harley]

Okay folks! I'll try and have my decision and rationale for this fight up soon, possibly before the end of this week. Very, very sorry for the wait.

[Ebonywood Hellscythe]

Sorry to be a bother Jade; I know you're busy, but it's been almost 2 months now. Are you still planning on judging this?

I'd almost forgotten about it myself, but I'd like to get this 2 month cliffhanger brought to an end.

[Jade Harley]

Oh, goshdangit, forgot all about this. I'm SO sorry, guys. Here's my judgment, with a weaknesses vs strengths format:

Ash's weaknesses were a lack of attention to detail in some areas and excessive detail in others, I'd advise paying more attention to describing actions and injury in the future. Strengths included dialogue, good sentence structure, and a healthy dose of humor.

Desman's weaknesses were a scattered thought process when writing and a lack of strong descriptive language. Strengths included an admirable attention to character, humor, and being an adorable robot.

Aquamarine's main weakness was a tendency toward repetition, using the same words over and over again (sometimes in the same paragraph!) Strengths included a nice focus on the battle itself, with moves described and an exchange of injuries allowed in a way that didn't seem to tip too far in favor of any one side.

Revan's weaknesses were about the same as Desman's, I would recommend trying to really allow an even focus on both your character's headspace and the ongoing fight. Still, kudos for really driving the character's influence on the struggle home!

Ebonywood's main weakness was probably a slight lack of personal flavor, I know I would appreciate some strong metaphors and maybe more really powerful, physically-affecting words, but overall this was some solid writing. A superb and conscious relating of events, like a memory. Great job.

Yet, the fused state of Black Ash ultimately carried through. It was the most interesting part of the fight and it's focus, and the peculiar cooperation between these two characters is something I personally liked, while the warring personalities of the other three characters logically couldn't help their cause.

THE WINNER IS: BLACK ASH!

[Ebonywood Hellscythe]

After rereading the thread (it was like 2 months ago, lol), I do see what you mean. And I guess I tend to still be like that a bit now - although for my Ebony posts I think it has gotten a bit better during Dark Data compared to here. Anyway, it's given me something to work for.