Dunes Discussion

[Omni]

Yeah Link's judging. Of course if you're free now and want to do it, I'm sure Gan wouldn't mind either.

[Ganondorf]

I'm fine with whatevs.

[Ganondorf]

While I'm thinking about it, anyone else want to weigh in on this battle of the villains?

[Kurusu Akira]

I'm just happy that the Warlock Punch happened.

[Ganondorf]

Bump for judging.

[Proto Man]

If this isn't done soon, I will do it for you guys.

[Ganondorf]

Appreciate it, amigo.

[Dark Link]

Recently, Ganon opened a thread where he encouraged people to leave feedback regarding the fight between him and Enel. While the thread has been closed, since he went to such trouble to learn what others thought of the fight, I figured I could read it myself and post here about what I thought of it.

Before anything else, let me just say that I really enjoyed the fight in spite of reading it out of context. The posts were well-written and the fight was well-executed. The most interesting part about it was that the two of you essentially balanced each other out as writers, complementing one another with each other's strengths. I have absolutely no doubt you guys are going to make a great team and it will be an extremely tough challenge for anyone to take you guys on.

That said, my feedback will be kind of worthless if I just leave it at that, so I have no choice but to resort to nitpicks in order to at least leave some constructive criticism for you guys.

Enel, what I liked most about your posts is that you did a good job of establishing how the fight relates to your character, i.e. why it is important to him and what motivates him to fight his opponent. It helped make the fight feel like a part of a greater overarching plot rather than just an isolated incident. That said, I felt that some sections of your posts were too much like a raw play-by-play of the fight, which made them a rather dry read. I mean, it was a fight and I'm all for substance over style, but I still think you could have safely used more of your post to be a bit more descriptive and ground the action to a specific time and place.

Ganon, the best part of your writing was that it was well-rounded. You were descriptive enough without going overboard and you touched upon many elements related to the fight. As a result, even though you were working under the same word count limitations as your opponent, I felt (as a reader) that I was able to "get more" out of your posts. However, unlike your opponent, I don't think you did a good job of relating the fight to your character. In fact, the information regarding Ganon's motivations are kind of contradictory and confusing. I suppose it's possible you intended to have Ganon appear conflicted or that the peace offer he made at the end really was a ruse....but either way, that didn't really come across within the text itself.

In any case, regardless of those nitpicks, it was a great fight and I don't envy Link's/Proto Man's job of judging it. I know I would have a very hard time picking a winner. My hat's off to you, gentlemen! Good luck! :tiphat:

[Ganondorf]

First off, thanks for your critique. I always appreciate a kind word and a helpful suggestion.

While I don't speak for Enel, I found that the word count we agreed upon was incredibly restrictive. All three of my posts would have been 800+ words, which may have been a factor in why I may not have gotten all my points across. The peace offering at the end was actually meant to be a final gamble to stop the fight, once Ganondorf began flagging and realized he may not win the thing. When Enel didn't let up, that was when Ganon resorted to his dark magick.

I will, however, try to work on fielding my character's motivations more in my writing.

[Omni]

Hah! And to think you originally wanted a 400 word limit. Toldja

Thanks for the critique, Dark Link!

I'm cool for you to judge, Proto. I'm very surprised that Link hasn't judged yet.

[Proto Man]

I'll try to set aside some time tomorrow. Tonight I have to prep a pretty big lecture (whereas tomorrow is quiz day)