Bonus Request Topic/Quest Turn-in Topic

[Android 17]

Submitting the follow thread for Participation bonus as well as possibly Great/Exemplary writing bonus, please and thank you

Link to topic - http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=8742
Personal Storyline
Participating characters (please list): Seventeen, Trixie, Jeff (as Cell -- Retired), All Might (Inactive since September)
Total character count including spaces: Seventeen (126326), Trixie (25570)
Total word count: Seventeen (22084), Trixie (4445)

[Hecate Rothchild]

Hoping to get this one possibly evaluated for at least "great", Please provide feedback in how I can further increase the level of my writing.

Link to topic: Link
Quest or Personal Storyline?: Personal storyline/bounty hunt
Participating characters (please list): Hecate Rothchild, Warren Zimmer, Cirno, Dane Regan
Total character count including spaces (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable): Hecate (21,754) Warren Zimmer (4,390) Cirno (7,680) Dane Regan (5,656)
Total word count (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable): Hecate (4,002) Warren Zimmer (826) Cirno (1,450) Dane Regan (999)

[King Ghidorah]

Just submitting some nexus threads for a few bits of OM

Link to topic http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=9455 return to the nexus
Storyline
Participating characters; The Emperor and Essent
Total word count; Essent: 1217 and Emps: 981
Total character count; Essent: 6694 and Emps: 5302

Father's blessings http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=8396
Story
The Emperor, Erik Vrell, Shay Cormac, Marisa and Alexander Anderson
Shay; 2061 words and 11603 characters
Alexander; 1288 words and 7203 characters
Erik; 321 words and 1813 characters
Emps; 555 words and 2981 characters

*chuckles softly while he sharpens the blades on his new diesel-powered bonus-thresher* 

Emperor: 29.81+53.02 = 82.83
Essent: 66.94
Shay: 116.03
Alexander: 72.03
Erik:18.3

*Mad laughter, the rumble of tank-treads, and the roar of a sixteen-cylinder engine fills your ears as a juddering, belching heap of gurgling hydraulics and screaming blades bears down upon you all* 

Official staff investigators will be along to try to suss out the mystery of this horrible bonus-tragedy.

~~~~Updated on 2-20 (Alex)~~~~~~

[King Ghidorah]

Submitting the follow thread for Participation bonus as well as possibly Great/Exemplary writing bonus, please and thank you

Link to topic - http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=8742
Personal Storyline
Participating characters (please list):  Seventeen, Trixie, Jeff (as Cell -- Retired), All Might (Inactive since September)
Total character count including spaces:  Seventeen (126326), Trixie (25570)
Total word count: Seventeen (22084), Trixie (4445)

Dios Mio.  I'm going to need the big guns for this one. 

*pulls the original Bonus Cannon out of mothballs*

Participation + Exemplary and Participation + Great... FIRE!

Seventeen: + 3789.78. (You telenovela-lovin' monster.) 
Trixie: + 511.4

Someone higher up the chain of command will attend to the aftermath.

~~~~Updated on 2-20 (Alex)~~~~~~

[Albert Wesker]

Step One
Quest or Personal Storyline? Quest -- Ashen Walk
Participating characters (please list): Albert Wesker
Total character count including spaces: 58,770
Total word count: 10,296

[Kuzuru]

Two Idiots and a Deathwish
Personal Storyline
Participating Characters - Renji
Total Character Count - 71,385
Total Word Count - 12,783

[Daniel]

Requesting Participation bonus for Minato and Kakashi. From post #7 - #20 We used this thread as a go-between, so not sure if it counts and it's a little bit jumpy. But we should be good for the participation.

The Yellow Flash and The Village of Mokugakure.
Quest or Personal Story line: Personal Story line
Participating Characters: Minato Namikaze, Kakashi Hatake

Kakashi

Word Count - 7,555
Character Count - 43,551

Minato

Word Count - 6,698
Character Count - 37,362

(Word and character count were calculated with WordCounter)

[Hecate Rothchild]

Hoping to get this one possibly evaluated for at least "great", Please provide feedback in how I can further increase the level of my writing.

Link to topic: Link
Quest or Personal Storyline?: Personal storyline/bounty hunt
Participating characters (please list): Hecate Rothchild, Warren Zimmer, Cirno, Dane Regan
Total character count including spaces (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable): Hecate (21,754) Warren Zimmer (4,390) Cirno (7,680) Dane Regan (5,656)
Total word count (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable): Hecate (4,002) Warren Zimmer (826) Cirno (1,450) Dane Regan (999)

[Dane Regan]

T'is an old thread, but all of the participants are done with it :frogbon: Gibe bonus OM pls.

Link: Genesis of Apotheosis
Quest/Personal Storyline? Personal Storyline for everyone.
Participating characters: Tearen Wover, Strazberry Strazio Rockwell, Gamzee Makara, Dane Regan, Guu, Kelly MacAryn and Malon
Total character/word count: (this was a long thread so I hope I didn't miss any posts or such. Character and word count was obtained using MS Word)

Tearen: 65,752 (11,262 words)
Strazio: 34,760 (6,100 words)
Gamzee: 26,285 (4,849 words)
Dane: 57,836 (9,968 words)
Guu: 15,988 (2,912 words)
Kelly: 32,233 (5,330 words)
Malon: 60,584 (10,896 words)

Confirming the word/character counts (I had some minor differences, but nothing big). I'd nominate everyone here for their respective bonuses (although I was in the thread so I guess I might be a tad biased). Added Tearen's too although I'm not sure if he still gets these.

Tearen: 1972.56 OM (Participation + Exemplary)
Strazio: 695.20 OM (Participation + Great)
Gamzee: 525.70 OM (Participation + Great)
Guu: 159.88 OM (Participation)
Kelly: 644.66 OM (Participation + Great)
Malon: 1817.52 OM (Participation + Exemplary)
(A higher up will give out the OM later)

And then there is Dane's bonus which I don't think I can really give out since that's me. But his would be 1156.72 OM for participation + great, or 1735.08 OM for participation + exemplary. So, if anyone gets the time to go through and make a ruling, that'd be great.

[Malon]

Referring to Dane's just now, he's definitely deserving of that Exemplary bonus himself. The thread was immensely fun to write and he contributed his fair share to that :frogbon:

[Dane Regan]

Chasing up on a couple of small-ish participation bonuses here.

A-Myst The Forest

Sandy Myst: 1085 words, 5935 characters
Yuuka Kazami (Renko): 518 words, 2825 characters
Dane Regan: 849 words, 4779 characters
China: 2305 words, 12730 characters
Clownpiece: 684 words, 3865 characters

Participation Bonuses:
Sandy Myst: 59.35 OM
Yuuka Kazami: 28.25 OM
Dane Regan: 47.79 OM
China: 127.30 OM
Clownpiece: 38.65 OM

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Pacing Themselves
Sandy Myst: 1727 words, 9644 characters
Yuuka Kazami (Renko): 623 words, 3482 characters
Dane Regan: 440 words, 2369 characters
China: 861 words, 4837 characters
Clownpiece: 1104 words, 6282 characters

Participation Bonuses:
Sandy Myst: 96.44 OM
Yuuka Kazami: 34.82 OM
Dane Regan: 23.69 OM
China: 48.37 OM
Clownpiece: 62.82 OM

Bumping this (the OM hasn't been given out and I think it got missed).

[Jade Harley]

Step One
Quest or Personal Storyline? Quest -- Ashen Walk
Participating characters (please list): Albert Wesker
Total character count including spaces: 58,770
Total word count: 10,296

Exemplary Writing bonus granted! (Also your quest is complete, congrats. I'll add your rewards: Drake Skull (Flavor Item), Acceptance with Gorons).

Albert Wesker: 1,175.4 OM

Two Idiots and a Deathwish
Personal Storyline
Participating Characters - Renji
Total Character Count - 71,385
Total Word Count - 12,783

Exemplary Writing bonus granted!

Kuzuru: 1,427.7 OM

Requesting Participation bonus for Minato and Kakashi. From post #7 - #20 We used this thread as a go-between, so not sure if it counts and it's a little bit jumpy. But we should be good for the participation.

The Yellow Flash and The Village of Mokugakure.
Quest or Personal Story line: Personal Story line
Participating Characters: Minato Namikaze, Kakashi Hatake

Kakashi

Word Count - 7,555
Character Count - 43,551

Minato

Word Count - 6,698
Character Count - 37,362

(Word and character count were calculated with WordCounter)

Participation and Great Writing bonuses granted!

Kakashi Hatake: 871.02 OM

Minato Namikaze: 747.24 OM

T'is an old thread, but all of the participants are done with it :frogbon: Gibe bonus OM pls.

Link: Genesis of Apotheosis
Quest/Personal Storyline? Personal Storyline for everyone.
Participating characters: Tearen Wover, Strazberry Strazio Rockwell, Gamzee Makara, Dane Regan, Guu, Kelly MacAryn and Malon
Total character/word count: (this was a long thread so I hope I didn't miss any posts or such. Character and word count was obtained using MS Word)

Tearen: 65,752 (11,262 words)
Strazio: 34,760 (6,100 words)
Gamzee: 26,285 (4,849 words)
Dane: 57,836 (9,968 words)
Guu: 15,988 (2,912 words)
Kelly: 32,233 (5,330 words)
Malon: 60,584 (10,896 words)

Confirming the word/character counts (I had some minor differences, but nothing big). I'd nominate everyone here for their respective bonuses (although I was in the thread so I guess I might be a tad biased). Added Tearen's too although I'm not sure if he still gets these.

Tearen: 1972.56 OM (Participation + Exemplary)
Strazio: 695.20 OM (Participation + Great)
Gamzee: 525.70 OM (Participation + Great)
Guu: 159.88 OM (Participation)
Kelly: 644.66 OM (Participation + Great)
Malon: 1817.52 OM (Participation + Exemplary)
(A higher up will give out the OM later)

And then there is Dane's bonus which I don't think I can really give out since that's me. But his would be 1156.72 OM for participation + great, or 1735.08 OM for participation + exemplary. So, if anyone gets the time to go through and make a ruling, that'd be great.

I'll go ahead and grant the Dane Regan account a Participation and Exemplary bonus. Will update these logs in a mo'.

Chasing up on a couple of small-ish participation bonuses here.

A-Myst The Forest

Sandy Myst: 1085 words, 5935 characters
Yuuka Kazami (Renko): 518 words, 2825 characters
Dane Regan: 849 words, 4779 characters
China: 2305 words, 12730 characters
Clownpiece: 684 words, 3865 characters

Participation Bonuses:
Sandy Myst: 59.35 OM
Yuuka Kazami: 28.25 OM
Dane Regan: 47.79 OM
China: 127.30 OM
Clownpiece: 38.65 OM

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Pacing Themselves
Sandy Myst: 1727 words, 9644 characters
Yuuka Kazami (Renko): 623 words, 3482 characters
Dane Regan: 440 words, 2369 characters
China: 861 words, 4837 characters
Clownpiece: 1104 words, 6282 characters

Participation Bonuses:
Sandy Myst: 96.44 OM
Yuuka Kazami: 34.82 OM
Dane Regan: 23.69 OM
China: 48.37 OM
Clownpiece: 62.82 OM

Bumping this (the OM hasn't been given out and I think it got missed).

Participation bonuses granted. Please hold as I update logs!

ALL LOGS UPDATED! - Jade

[Shantotto]

Hoping to get this one possibly evaluated for at least "great", Please provide feedback in how I can further increase the level of my writing.

Link to topic: Link
Quest or Personal Storyline?: Personal storyline/bounty hunt
Participating characters (please list): Hecate Rothchild, Warren Zimmer, Cirno, Dane Regan
Total character count including spaces (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable): Hecate (21,754) Warren Zimmer (4,390) Cirno (7,680) Dane Regan (5,656)
Total word count (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable): Hecate (4,002) Warren Zimmer (826) Cirno (1,450) Dane Regan (999)

third time is the charm? or is this thread not eligible for anything?

[Jade Harley]

Hoping to get this one possibly evaluated for at least "great", Please provide feedback in how I can further increase the level of my writing.

Link to topic: Link
Quest or Personal Storyline?: Personal storyline/bounty hunt
Participating characters (please list): Hecate Rothchild, Warren Zimmer, Cirno, Dane Regan
Total character count including spaces (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable): Hecate (21,754) Warren Zimmer (4,390) Cirno (7,680) Dane Regan (5,656)
Total word count (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable): Hecate (4,002) Warren Zimmer (826) Cirno (1,450) Dane Regan (999)

third time is the charm? or is this thread not eligible for anything?

Hold your horses, dude! It's certainly eligible for a Participation bonus, so don't worry about that, you guys are all getting some extra OMs.

Hecate Rothchild: 111.88 OM (Participation. Only 2,056 words of your posts were written with other players' characters involved, so these are the only posts where the participation bonus applies.)
Warren Zimmer: 43.9 OM (Participation.)
Cirno: 76.8 OM (Participation.)
Dane Regan: 56.56 OM (Participation.)

Since Hecate was the only participant in this thread who would have had the word count needed for a Great Writing bonus, I've only included feedback for her. It is contained by the spoiler tag below!

[spoiler]You would have been able to get that Great Writing bonus, but unfortunately there were a significant amount of writing errors, such as a lack of punctuation in areas and the use of run-on sentences. For example, in the quoted portion below, there were several areas where a comma or even an entirely new sentence would have been needed. This made some areas seem clunky, even if your characterization and the actual ideas you were trying to express were great content.

It's all about presentation. I've added a bolded comment in this quote to point out one change I personally would have made, but see if you can identify any other punctuation errors or changes you could have made.

The man walked right up to Warren without a word and clamped an iron grip on Warren's shoulder [Here would have been a good place for a comma!] he began to finally speak. His voice seemed very fitting of a man such as him as he first introduced Warren to her then casually explained that he had placed a bounty upon her head. This confirmed her suspicion on what he had done beyond any reason of a doubt

There were also several spelling errors, like the ones in the quoted section below. You occasionally forgot letters, and your use of ellipses ("...") instead of a comma confused me a little. "..." is used to add emphasis, not list things. Still, I liked your inclusion of details like the heavy breathing and the appearance of Fort Zimmer-Rothchild.

Standing before Hecate was the two small children….”No not children.” She thought as she looked at the pair. The smaller one seemed to have the experience eyes of a veteran soldier, it was a trait that Hecate assumed few would have unless they had seen...done...or experienced something truly life altering. The other though taller in stature seemed more lacking in confidence. The heavier breathing had been a tell tale sign of at least some form of wound, tho Hecate opted to not say anything regarding that, instead she listened to the small warrior.

Overall, just look over your posts before you post them. Check for punctuation, spelling errors, or any mistakes that might affect a reader's enjoyment or harm their understanding of your writing.

You have a great foundation and certainly enough raw content output, it just needs a little fine-tuning to really elevate your writing to the best it can be![/spoiler]

[13-Jzall]

Link to topic http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=8933
Quest or Personal Storyline? quest
Participating characters (please list): 13-jzall
Total character count including spaces (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable) 52714 characters
Total word count (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable) 9760 words

[Blink]

Link to topic http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=8933
Quest or Personal Storyline? quest
Participating characters (please list): 13-jzall
Total character count including spaces (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable) 52714 characters
Total word count (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable) 9760 words

For context of anyone reading this, 13 had submitted this before and it was denied, but he has since gone back in and put some extra effort into it to spill it closer to the required word count.

Hey 13! That was actually not bad at all! You are getting so much better, bro. I appreciate the effort and you can tell from the beginning posts (which are still rough) to the latest ones that you are putting some real thought into how you engage with a reader, from a storytelling perspective. Keep working on your formatting (which you are obviously experimenting with). Avoid those big, ugly paragraphs that can be split up for the reader. Organization is key when trying to keep the reader engaged. Think of paragraph breaks like a period to a sentence. Its like that, except for a group of sentences. Does that make sense? Maybe not. Come hit me up if I'm being confusing.

Either way, have a Great bonus! We don't give flat OM rewards for quests anymore, but still consider the Quest Completed!

13-Jzall: 527.14 (50% of earned OM)

Will be updated upon audit from a senior staffer!

Log Updated/OM Given 3/10/18 by Trixie

[Shang Tsung]

Link to topic - http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=4943
Personal Storyline (Submitting for Participation + Writing bonus[?!])
Participating characters (please list): Shang Tsung, Atelos
Total character count including spaces: Seventeen (60984), Atelos (33579)
Total word count: Shang (10747), Atelos (5957)

[Blink]

Link to topic - http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=4943
Personal Storyline (Submitting for Participation + Writing bonus[?!])
Participating characters (please list): Shang Tsung, Atelos
Total character count including spaces: Seventeen (60984), Atelos (33579)
Total word count: Shang (10747), Atelos (5957)

Shang: 1829.52 OM (50% participation, 100% exemplary)
Atelos: 671.58 OM (50% participation, 50% great)

(Updated on 3-5-18 ~~Alex~~)

[Gilgamesh]

This is for the actual quest progression
http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=4509
Quest
Participating characters (Gilgamesh):
Total character count including spaces (112571)
Total word count (20036)
According to Google Docs

I would also like to submit it for participation(or any other writing bonuses that could apply), but my participation with others was spotty since at some point i was writing alone and dropped off the face of the earth.
http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=4509
Quest
Participating characters (Gilgamesh, Sasuke(Allanon), Kuzuru(Zanzibar), Shang Tsung(Argento) ):
Total character count including spaces (Gilgamesh: 95316 , Sasuke 19606, Kuzuru 15651, Shang Tsung 7168)
Total word count (Gilgamesh: 16861 words, Sasuke 3283, Kuzuru 2787, Shang Tsung 1261)
According to WordCounter

[Lambert]

The Empire
Hand of the Empire OR There Are No Lines OR Empire Justice (must choose one)
Requirements: Not affiliated with the Kingdom, Pokemon Liberation Front or Rebels.
Difficulty: Moderate (5000-10,000 words dependent on writing quality)
Reward: increased Influence with the Empire.

Scientist Salarian
Quest or Personal Storyline? Quest (There Are No Lines)
Participating characters (please list): Mordin Solus
Total character count including spaces: 62,810
Total word count: 11,309