02-14-2015, 06:51 PM
It's Only a Bad Dream - Before I share my own opinion on this post, I would like to add that me and Sarah are roleplaying together; in fact, this post takes place in the middle of our storyline. While I don't think that influenced my opinion of it, some might consider me a biased party in light of this fact, so I just wanted to mention that for the sake of full disclosure.
That having been said, this was a fantastic post, arguably one of the best the author has written so far. The primary reason why it's an enjoyable read is because the author did a good job of conveying the surreal. It starts out like a relatively normal scene, but with details that are somewhat off, but then gradually twists and breaks the laws of reality until the illusion is laid bare. While this is hardly new, it was executed in a compelling way. A particularly nice, no pun intended, touch was the part where Sarah tries to feel the fabric under her hands; touch is a sense that is often ignored in these sort of dream sequences and it helps add to the unnerving atmosphere.
Also, even though one could consider this common sense in terms of writing, I liked the fact that the Zerg remained unnamed until the appropriate time and that the creature speaking to Kerrigan remained unnamed entirely. Because Starcraft is such a well-known work of video game fiction, one could be tempted to just outright say what they are. But not only would this have been unfriendly towards people not familiar with Starcraft, it also would have somewhat robbed the Zerg of their mystique and terrifying presence. While a minor point, it makes me happy that the author kept this fact in mind, though she did make a minor error in the fact that the creature never presented them as the Zerg.
Overall, this was a well-executed dream sequence and I'm interested to see if the author will attempt to toy with the format a bit in future such sequences.
That having been said, this was a fantastic post, arguably one of the best the author has written so far. The primary reason why it's an enjoyable read is because the author did a good job of conveying the surreal. It starts out like a relatively normal scene, but with details that are somewhat off, but then gradually twists and breaks the laws of reality until the illusion is laid bare. While this is hardly new, it was executed in a compelling way. A particularly nice, no pun intended, touch was the part where Sarah tries to feel the fabric under her hands; touch is a sense that is often ignored in these sort of dream sequences and it helps add to the unnerving atmosphere.
Also, even though one could consider this common sense in terms of writing, I liked the fact that the Zerg remained unnamed until the appropriate time and that the creature speaking to Kerrigan remained unnamed entirely. Because Starcraft is such a well-known work of video game fiction, one could be tempted to just outright say what they are. But not only would this have been unfriendly towards people not familiar with Starcraft, it also would have somewhat robbed the Zerg of their mystique and terrifying presence. While a minor point, it makes me happy that the author kept this fact in mind, though she did make a minor error in the fact that the creature never presented them as the Zerg.
Overall, this was a well-executed dream sequence and I'm interested to see if the author will attempt to toy with the format a bit in future such sequences.
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