Deadpool's c&c

[Deadpool]

MADBULL34

It's funny putting all this work into this character. I can guarantee I've put more thought into him in two months than his creator did when drawing that abyssamal manga/OVA.

That's the point of places like Omniverse!! You're able to take characters, well-known or not, and dive into/create parts of their history/personality that were never really expanded upon in the source material. Which is both a challenging and funny thing to navigate.
Anyway, to your post!

I duck down low into the jungle roots and can smell the churned up soil, the charred BBQ scent of Morgan, and the shit emptying into the big injun’s pants. I can see my chest panting, heaving, and I barely register Damo dropping to the ground with two fresh holes in his back.

This is the only paragraph that I think just churns something inside of me. It's probably a preference thing--I'm almost certain it's a preference thing--but I would have written it more like this:
As I duck down into the jungle roots, all the odors of war hit me at once--churned up soil, the charred BBQ scent of Morgan, shit emptying into the big injun's pants. I'm panting so heavily that I barely register Damo dropping to the ground with two fresh holes in his back.




Just about everything else with this post I love. You either watch as many war-themed movies as I do, or you just have a knack for this sort of writing.
To be blunt, I normally don't like reading 1st-person present-tense writing, but it worked here; it worked because it really established that chaotic tone of war. Things were happening out of nowhere--coming from left and right--and that is a really good thing in this type of theme.
Also, I like how you brought the woman full circle there at the end. It even intensifies the meaning of all's fair in love and war.
And what I enjoy about your writing in general is that you're able to do really coherent, detailed narration but with simple words that majority of average Joe's can understand.

I'm not gonna mention anything grammar related, because you are an editor, and I'm sure when you're writing for fun you probably don't wanna be reminded of work XD