Deadpool's c&c

[Deadpool]

Much like Gildarts's thread, this will be a thread dedicated to giving feedback to my fellow writers.

I'd like a few things known first:
While I will always try to be constructive in my criticism, I will not fluff over your flaws; if you cannot handle honest (simon-like) criticism, this may not be for you.


Ok, so most of my c&c will be based on storytelling qualities, like clarity in description, tone of narration, plot, and how authentic and layered the characters in it are.
Grammar and spelling will not be criticized too much, unless I feel as if I can give You valuable lessons on it.

As a last thing, I'd like to say that I am in no way a volume reader, so if you intend on having my break down your entire thread please be aware that it might take me a while.

As always, post the link(s)of the content you want constructive criticism for.


Anyway, have at it!