06-07-2017, 04:05 PM
So, first off I’d like to say I’ve never really graded anyone’s work. ‘tis worth mentioning that I also haven’t read many threads that I’ve not personally been a part of myself.
But, in light of recent events, I decided to give it a try, to seek both inspiration for my own writing, as well as in an attempt to figure some internal things.
With those disclaimers out of the way, into the review we go!
An Alliance Forged in Blood.
Strazio:
The thread starts off rather explosively from Strazio’s side, something to hook the reader in. Unfortunately, I have no previous knowledge of Isaac, so I found some details about him to be ever so slightly difficult to grasp, such as why exactly the Empire was hunting him, the previous encounter or so that led to this. Why are they trying to trap him?
Strazio’s writing however is luscious regardless. ‘tis very smooth and pleasant to read, and the story telling flows very well from one tidbit of the action to the next. That is why, despite the fact that the first post has issues to those, whom haven’t read his previous works, manages to deliver a phenomenal start to the story.
I really like the second post, the drinking scene from Strazio, in general, I really like how Isaac acts toward Christa. The writing feels good, and flows very naturally. The silent competition between the pair is just a thrill to read.
I found myself enjoying the glance into the past of Isaac and the sector 8 a lot. There was something fascinating and chillingly morbid about it, yet it opens more upon Isaac’s demeanor and why he chooses mercy over deathdealing. I must say, throughout this saga, I’ve really grown to like Isaac as a character, and the Old Bloodlance has most certainly caught my interest.
The last post, I quite like it. A narrow escape with tension that celebrates on the comradery that has formed across the thread. A companionship that I’m certain will grow, or has grown in the future threads. Strazio also does well to enlighten the mood of their escape, to deliver a pleasing finish.
Gilfish:
An explosive start off for Christa as well, that kicks off much sooner than on Isaac’s side, thanks to the build up and groundwork already being laid for the scene. The post is chaotic and confusing, very much like the situation written about, which in my opinion befits it. It served well to leave me more curious about Christa and sets the ground for Strazio to start off the relationship construction.
Gilfish continues upon the bar scene, and very naturally keeps the battle of wits ongoing in very subtle manners as the two test each other in ways. The glass was a nice touch. I will admit that the typo of “Isaac” into “Issac” pulled me out of my immersion more than it should’ve, given it was very consistently typoed. However, it stays faithful to how Christa was painted to begin with, and continues to shed some light upon the matter, keeping my interest to the character very much alive.
The small-scale war that breaks out in the tavern, in my honest opinion I think it dragged on a bit long. I did like very much the bits and bobs, where even such carnage, was to an extent a competition between Isaac and Christa, where Christa aimed to kill, whilst Isaac aimed to spare. It was a very welcome and enjoyable thing to read. However like mentioned, in my opinion, the story might have benefitted of a tad shorter scale of a battle. But again, it did very well to point out and underline the very nature of Christa’s as a killer, as well as cement the reader on her thoughts and opinion about Isaac.
Christa has continued to pique my curiousity, because whilst she paints the canvas with blood, you can see hits and streaks of kindness and caring fluttered within. It makes for an interesting character to read, and offers a sense of depth to something, that could otherwise easily grow monotonic.
The thread that begun with an explosion, ends with an explosion. It’s only fitting. We see more of Christa’s arsenal and her underlying planning nature, as well as the fact that she should never be underestimated. Ever.
Boy I wouldn’t want to be on the wrong side of her rifle. Oh, and we fresh readers are also naturally introduced to whom I perceive to be an overarching ‘villain’ of sorts, Damien.
Overall:
I liked this, and I’m glad I read it. The both of them wrote very fluidly and it’s very clear a lot of thought and comradery, a sense of co-operation went into writing the thread.
It does very well to establish the two characters and their relationship, whilst retaining both of their individualities.
I’d have to say I quite like the both of them, and that they work excellently as a pair.
The occasional typo’s were a bit of a bother, but I could stomach them, as they happen to the best of us.
Despite my limited experience with grading and reading other people’s writing, I’d say this thread is worthy of a ‘Great’ nomination.
The writing and story is coherent and very enjoyable to read in my opinion. There was no low points, nor did the story linger, aside the minor gripe I had with the bar shoot-out.
The occasional typo that I found, was “Isaac” being written “Issac.” I cannot say what happened there, but I’m almost certain it’s probably Word or such having auto-corrected it, which slipped past notice despite proof reads.
As such, I’d say the thread is worthy of the Great nomination. Good work, both of you. The ride was an enjoyable and pleasant one, and as it begun with explosion, so it ended as well.
Would I recommend it for others? Yes. Yes I would.
But, in light of recent events, I decided to give it a try, to seek both inspiration for my own writing, as well as in an attempt to figure some internal things.
With those disclaimers out of the way, into the review we go!
An Alliance Forged in Blood.
Strazio:
The thread starts off rather explosively from Strazio’s side, something to hook the reader in. Unfortunately, I have no previous knowledge of Isaac, so I found some details about him to be ever so slightly difficult to grasp, such as why exactly the Empire was hunting him, the previous encounter or so that led to this. Why are they trying to trap him?
Strazio’s writing however is luscious regardless. ‘tis very smooth and pleasant to read, and the story telling flows very well from one tidbit of the action to the next. That is why, despite the fact that the first post has issues to those, whom haven’t read his previous works, manages to deliver a phenomenal start to the story.
I really like the second post, the drinking scene from Strazio, in general, I really like how Isaac acts toward Christa. The writing feels good, and flows very naturally. The silent competition between the pair is just a thrill to read.
I found myself enjoying the glance into the past of Isaac and the sector 8 a lot. There was something fascinating and chillingly morbid about it, yet it opens more upon Isaac’s demeanor and why he chooses mercy over deathdealing. I must say, throughout this saga, I’ve really grown to like Isaac as a character, and the Old Bloodlance has most certainly caught my interest.
The last post, I quite like it. A narrow escape with tension that celebrates on the comradery that has formed across the thread. A companionship that I’m certain will grow, or has grown in the future threads. Strazio also does well to enlighten the mood of their escape, to deliver a pleasing finish.
Gilfish:
An explosive start off for Christa as well, that kicks off much sooner than on Isaac’s side, thanks to the build up and groundwork already being laid for the scene. The post is chaotic and confusing, very much like the situation written about, which in my opinion befits it. It served well to leave me more curious about Christa and sets the ground for Strazio to start off the relationship construction.
Gilfish continues upon the bar scene, and very naturally keeps the battle of wits ongoing in very subtle manners as the two test each other in ways. The glass was a nice touch. I will admit that the typo of “Isaac” into “Issac” pulled me out of my immersion more than it should’ve, given it was very consistently typoed. However, it stays faithful to how Christa was painted to begin with, and continues to shed some light upon the matter, keeping my interest to the character very much alive.
The small-scale war that breaks out in the tavern, in my honest opinion I think it dragged on a bit long. I did like very much the bits and bobs, where even such carnage, was to an extent a competition between Isaac and Christa, where Christa aimed to kill, whilst Isaac aimed to spare. It was a very welcome and enjoyable thing to read. However like mentioned, in my opinion, the story might have benefitted of a tad shorter scale of a battle. But again, it did very well to point out and underline the very nature of Christa’s as a killer, as well as cement the reader on her thoughts and opinion about Isaac.
Christa has continued to pique my curiousity, because whilst she paints the canvas with blood, you can see hits and streaks of kindness and caring fluttered within. It makes for an interesting character to read, and offers a sense of depth to something, that could otherwise easily grow monotonic.
The thread that begun with an explosion, ends with an explosion. It’s only fitting. We see more of Christa’s arsenal and her underlying planning nature, as well as the fact that she should never be underestimated. Ever.
Boy I wouldn’t want to be on the wrong side of her rifle. Oh, and we fresh readers are also naturally introduced to whom I perceive to be an overarching ‘villain’ of sorts, Damien.
Overall:
I liked this, and I’m glad I read it. The both of them wrote very fluidly and it’s very clear a lot of thought and comradery, a sense of co-operation went into writing the thread.
It does very well to establish the two characters and their relationship, whilst retaining both of their individualities.
I’d have to say I quite like the both of them, and that they work excellently as a pair.
The occasional typo’s were a bit of a bother, but I could stomach them, as they happen to the best of us.
Despite my limited experience with grading and reading other people’s writing, I’d say this thread is worthy of a ‘Great’ nomination.
The writing and story is coherent and very enjoyable to read in my opinion. There was no low points, nor did the story linger, aside the minor gripe I had with the bar shoot-out.
The occasional typo that I found, was “Isaac” being written “Issac.” I cannot say what happened there, but I’m almost certain it’s probably Word or such having auto-corrected it, which slipped past notice despite proof reads.
As such, I’d say the thread is worthy of the Great nomination. Good work, both of you. The ride was an enjoyable and pleasant one, and as it begun with explosion, so it ended as well.
Would I recommend it for others? Yes. Yes I would.
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