05-17-2017, 01:54 PM
Offical Batman Review
Alright scrubs, let's see what we got here. This time on Batman's review : Family of steel - Man on fire. Wow, that sounds like bad superman sequel, where he gets like 6 children running wild like unguided projectile, accidentally laser beamed the neighbor on fire or something like that. But hey, it's a title, let's see what the story was about.
If you are one of those sensitive little souls that cares about spoilers and stuff, read the story before reading the reviews. READ THE STORY BEFORE THE REVIEW! I mean, what idiot would read a perfectly good review before knowing what it's about? Yeah I'm looking at you, go read and then come back.
You finished? good! lets continue!
Overall i enjoyed the story, you don't really see where it's going until it hits you right in the face, just like it did proto man up on that volcano with the crazy Russian. But let's not go ahead too quick. First post i was like, "who are all these men? Quick man, heat man", i was waiting for Iron man to show up but i was let down. Luckily Alex is a good enough writer to know what to do with a strong support cast. Giving each of them enough background story to fit in without demanding too much of the audience. Supporting NPC's like heat man and Cell Delta got even more background which personally i enjoyed allot, it gave the characters soooo much more debt instead of just 'here's a bad guy, lets punch him in the face. ( Don't get me wrong, it usually solves my problems but still. ) So a big plus, the background of the supporting NPC!
The next thing that i have to point out is during hectic events like running away from a soviet cyborg while a vulcano is exploding ( i told you to read it didn't i?! ) he takes time to implement little sentances that colour the scene. Let me give you an example :
Now thats good writing folks! The guy was running from his life, trying to survive, and the writer actually managed to squeeze in a nice little detail about the characters robotic bodily functions? Those are the things i like to see.
Which brings me to the next point. Writing as a non human its pretty hard to think what a cyborg might be going through. The struggle both Heat man and proto man have is put in the story in the best way possible, both have doubts about if what happened was good or bad. Let me rephrase that, Both had doubts about their own state of mind and if they were correct to judge others. Something a normal human would immediatly know. These cyborgs have struggles of their own, something that made me as a reader feel for the characters. ( EVEN BATMAN FEELS!) And after you feel a connection with them....Alex rips them away from you... WHYYYY ALEX WHYYYYY did Heat man have to go down like this! I really liked the guy, and you George R.R Martin'ed him..... we will have words about this later.
Last positive point i would like to add is the "bad guy" of the story, with the amount of background given to him you really start to know why the others fear him. Pointing out his accent was a nice touch, in my head i was reading it with a thick russian voice, instead of morgan freeman like i usually do. It's difficult to create a antagonist that doesn't go over the top and is still believable, but you nailed him.
But nobody is perfect, and if i stay here to stroke Alex's ego even further he will become like me. So lets point out a few things that i personally would change/ improve.
For someone unknown with the while proto-man history and characters it was a little difficult for me to get into the story, even though they got some background it took me a while to figure out who was on what side. Might be just me though but I still wanted to point it out. Things became clear the more I read.
All in all it was a very enjoyable story, and it made me want to continue reading, thats all i want in a story, a reason to keep on going. ( with a nice plot ofcourse.) It made me look at my own writing and i found this story to be full of usefull tips, so newbies, have at it and read the damn thing!
Would Batman recommend this story to a friend: Yes!
Bonus: Batman would like to recommend this story for the exceptional bonus.
Final score: Batman gives you 8/10 Batpoints!
If you are one of those sensitive little souls that cares about spoilers and stuff, read the story before reading the reviews. READ THE STORY BEFORE THE REVIEW! I mean, what idiot would read a perfectly good review before knowing what it's about? Yeah I'm looking at you, go read and then come back.
You finished? good! lets continue!
Overall i enjoyed the story, you don't really see where it's going until it hits you right in the face, just like it did proto man up on that volcano with the crazy Russian. But let's not go ahead too quick. First post i was like, "who are all these men? Quick man, heat man", i was waiting for Iron man to show up but i was let down. Luckily Alex is a good enough writer to know what to do with a strong support cast. Giving each of them enough background story to fit in without demanding too much of the audience. Supporting NPC's like heat man and Cell Delta got even more background which personally i enjoyed allot, it gave the characters soooo much more debt instead of just 'here's a bad guy, lets punch him in the face. ( Don't get me wrong, it usually solves my problems but still. ) So a big plus, the background of the supporting NPC!
The next thing that i have to point out is during hectic events like running away from a soviet cyborg while a vulcano is exploding ( i told you to read it didn't i?! ) he takes time to implement little sentances that colour the scene. Let me give you an example :
Quote:By this time, Proto Man had regained his bearings, despite the thick ash that clouded his physical vision. He took a split-second to appreciate the fact that he didn’t have to worry about ash-filled lungs stealing his breath.
Now thats good writing folks! The guy was running from his life, trying to survive, and the writer actually managed to squeeze in a nice little detail about the characters robotic bodily functions? Those are the things i like to see.
Which brings me to the next point. Writing as a non human its pretty hard to think what a cyborg might be going through. The struggle both Heat man and proto man have is put in the story in the best way possible, both have doubts about if what happened was good or bad. Let me rephrase that, Both had doubts about their own state of mind and if they were correct to judge others. Something a normal human would immediatly know. These cyborgs have struggles of their own, something that made me as a reader feel for the characters. ( EVEN BATMAN FEELS!) And after you feel a connection with them....Alex rips them away from you... WHYYYY ALEX WHYYYYY did Heat man have to go down like this! I really liked the guy, and you George R.R Martin'ed him..... we will have words about this later.
Last positive point i would like to add is the "bad guy" of the story, with the amount of background given to him you really start to know why the others fear him. Pointing out his accent was a nice touch, in my head i was reading it with a thick russian voice, instead of morgan freeman like i usually do. It's difficult to create a antagonist that doesn't go over the top and is still believable, but you nailed him.
But nobody is perfect, and if i stay here to stroke Alex's ego even further he will become like me. So lets point out a few things that i personally would change/ improve.
For someone unknown with the while proto-man history and characters it was a little difficult for me to get into the story, even though they got some background it took me a while to figure out who was on what side. Might be just me though but I still wanted to point it out. Things became clear the more I read.
Final judgement!
All in all it was a very enjoyable story, and it made me want to continue reading, thats all i want in a story, a reason to keep on going. ( with a nice plot ofcourse.) It made me look at my own writing and i found this story to be full of usefull tips, so newbies, have at it and read the damn thing!
Would Batman recommend this story to a friend: Yes!
Bonus: Batman would like to recommend this story for the exceptional bonus.
Final score: Batman gives you 8/10 Batpoints!
Off to the next Review!
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