Move Creation Workshop

[Amaterasu]

Essent turns a whole limb into a massing claw-like tentacle which she can extend the more focus she uses. This tenta-limb isn't actually a part of her body and can be harmed without harming the user. The claw is the diameter of her arm all around. It is an instant transformation. She must be standing still to use this move. The longer she makes it, the more focus it takes. It requires aiming manually before launch. There are two ways this power can be used: like a whip or like a shot (where it extends then immediately retracts). It can extend 2 yards at maximum. Due to how far you can extend, the power depends on Essent's SPD and TEC. The higher, the less tired she will be as it takes a lot of focus. The minimum amount of time to focus is a minutes with the max being three.

Well... while there's a lot more info in there now, the description feels very jumbled and confusing. I think that the pieces of information are not in order.

-"Due to how far you can extend, the power depends on Essent's SPD and TEC. The higher, the less tired she will be as it takes a lot of focus." SPD and TEC won't really influence that, it would just change how fast and how skillfully Essent can manipulate her whip-thing. Also, be more specific. Maybe say how long Essent can use the arm before being too tired, or how often she can "shoot" it?

-If it's not a part of Essent's body, how durable is it, and can it be repaired if damaged/destroyed?

-The two to three minutes to focus, what is it for? To shorten/lengthen the arm? Be a bit clearer please

-If it's variable in length and can be used for whipping and shooting, the cost would likely be 900 by the way. Just a note.

The bottom line is that the most must be understandable for anyone who reads it Try reading it from an outsider's perspective. (lame advice, I know)


Also, what Tearen said regarding elasticity: if the limb can dynamically stretch like rubber, then yes, you'll need it. But if you can lengthen/shorten the arm by focusing, then use it at its current length, physical strength + ranged proficiency would be sufficient.