12-13-2014, 06:54 PM
I couldn't find the time to read "Perhaps I Made a Wrong Turn", so my apologies to Gherron and Fawklin.
Twice Chosen - The Omniverse has been blessed in the sense that we've been getting some talented writers who have managed to leave a very good impression right off the gate. The Chosen Undead is no exception in this regard and I once again find myself in a situation where I can't really think of any criticism I can offer.
I'm not sure if this is merely an interesting coincidence or if the author was inspired by his fellow Dark Souls player, but like Artorias, he depicted the fountain's appearance as something relevant to the character. It's a very nice touch, especially since the fountain is something that can be easy to neglect. Also, I agree with Proto that it was neat that the Chosen didn't start off with his sword and shield and only subsequently summoned them, demonstrating to the player how Primes use Omnilum to obtain what they seek.
On a side note, I was surprised at how laid back and lighthearted the author's style of writing was. Not that I minded that in the slightest, but it made for a rather interesting contrast to the source material the author is using. Then again, the character is in a different, less bleak world now, so one can't say it doesn't fit.
So, simply put, a great start. I'm very interested to see what will happen if/when Chosen encounters Artorias, both because they are from the same universe as well as because of the dichotomy of the writing styles of their respective roleplayers.
A Soul Uneasy - I don't have much to say regarding this post, since Lex did just as admirable of a job as Chosen, albeit in a different way. While the concept of having a being trapped inside an individual certainly isn't new, the author rationalised and executed it fairly well. The tatoo-like images covering Lex's body, the abilities granted to him by Spectres, the exotic terminology....all of this helps give the character and his unique nature a mystical quality that really excites the mind and makes the reader wonder what the Spectres really enable him to do. The mystery regarding the missing Spectres is also interesting, making one wonder if they're just gone or if they just ended up being scrambled around the Omniverse.
One thing that I found a bit lacking is that neither Lex himself nor Ismat really exhibited much of a personality in these posts, coming off as a bit uninspired as a result. That said, considering these were the author's first posts and how much he/she worked to establish the character's abilities and their nature, I don't feel the need to criticise this aspect much.
Regardless, the author did such a good job of establishing the primary concept behind the character that I'm interested to see what kind of impact the Omniverse will have on him.
Twice Chosen - The Omniverse has been blessed in the sense that we've been getting some talented writers who have managed to leave a very good impression right off the gate. The Chosen Undead is no exception in this regard and I once again find myself in a situation where I can't really think of any criticism I can offer.
I'm not sure if this is merely an interesting coincidence or if the author was inspired by his fellow Dark Souls player, but like Artorias, he depicted the fountain's appearance as something relevant to the character. It's a very nice touch, especially since the fountain is something that can be easy to neglect. Also, I agree with Proto that it was neat that the Chosen didn't start off with his sword and shield and only subsequently summoned them, demonstrating to the player how Primes use Omnilum to obtain what they seek.
On a side note, I was surprised at how laid back and lighthearted the author's style of writing was. Not that I minded that in the slightest, but it made for a rather interesting contrast to the source material the author is using. Then again, the character is in a different, less bleak world now, so one can't say it doesn't fit.
So, simply put, a great start. I'm very interested to see what will happen if/when Chosen encounters Artorias, both because they are from the same universe as well as because of the dichotomy of the writing styles of their respective roleplayers.
A Soul Uneasy - I don't have much to say regarding this post, since Lex did just as admirable of a job as Chosen, albeit in a different way. While the concept of having a being trapped inside an individual certainly isn't new, the author rationalised and executed it fairly well. The tatoo-like images covering Lex's body, the abilities granted to him by Spectres, the exotic terminology....all of this helps give the character and his unique nature a mystical quality that really excites the mind and makes the reader wonder what the Spectres really enable him to do. The mystery regarding the missing Spectres is also interesting, making one wonder if they're just gone or if they just ended up being scrambled around the Omniverse.
One thing that I found a bit lacking is that neither Lex himself nor Ismat really exhibited much of a personality in these posts, coming off as a bit uninspired as a result. That said, considering these were the author's first posts and how much he/she worked to establish the character's abilities and their nature, I don't feel the need to criticise this aspect much.
Regardless, the author did such a good job of establishing the primary concept behind the character that I'm interested to see what kind of impact the Omniverse will have on him.
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