Official Move Approval IV

[Makoto Yuki]

Upgrading this:

Zio - Ranged Proficiency - 300 OM

A simple offensive spell that creates a lightning bolt in the caster's grasping hand, measuring two meters in length and three centimeters in diameter. The bolt travels as quickly as an arrow and delivers a powerful shock, but is incapable of stunning. Has a casting time of two seconds. If the caster's focus is broken by a direct hit the casting is broken and must be started anew, significantly weak hits won't achieve this effect. The mental effort required stops the caster from simultaneously casting other spells, but otherwise leaves them free to move around. Is incredibly accurate up to 15 meters, becoming unreliable and gradually fizzling out until it dissappears completely at 20 meters. Casting the spell once is mildly strenuous, and extensive use can lead to extreme fatigue.

Into this:

Zio: Revised - Ranged Proficiency - 600 OM

A yellow bolt of lightning, two meters long and three centimeters in diameter, thrown like a lance. Can be loosed as quickly as Makoto can make a grasping motion with a free hand. When thrown has the approximate speed of a bullet and a max range of 60 meters. Not very tiring but not particularly powerful, it's best used to soften up or otherwise harass an opponent.

It's possible to concentrate more fully on casting this spell however, by charging for up to two seconds, the resulting bolt is comparatively slower, and has a range limited to 20 meters. This version of the spell is much more strenuous, to account for the heavier firepower.

 
I added the new version and wrote it as the 'base' move with the original being the 'charged up' variation. I tried to balance the new form and to not change anything about the old one, but I probably messed something up.  :frog:

Bump.

If I'm taking too many liberties tell me and I'll just sell the old one, if the problem is balancing issues they'll need to be pointed out first to be fixed.