07-20-2017, 12:44 AM
(07-19-2017, 01:20 AM)The Vision Wrote: Goku and I finished Twinkle in Sweet Repose.
Link to topic http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=8148
Quest or Personal Storyline?: Quest
Participating characters (please list): The Vision, Goku (Please disregard Marcus Wright)
Total character count including spaces (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable):
Vision: 112043
Goku: 28218
Total word count (excluding bbcode, images, etcetera. Please do separately for each member if applicable):
Vision: 18899
Goku: 5097
An excellent read! I appreciate the planning that evidently went into the storyline, and both of you know your characters quite well. As a programmer, I do love the pseudo-code you've given vision (although he should know better than to use his dead wife's name as his admin password. That's how you get hacked, Vis) Seeing the contrast between Vision's logical methodology, and Goku's intuitive hero-ing was also a treat.
You guys have also hit the word requirements solidly, and you have met the requirements of the questline. The only loose end I can see is that we do not hear anything from Lysander after the initial split. You can either address this in a conclusion post or leave it unmentioned, assuming he will simply join the lost souls of Silent Hill, but I figured I would point it out.
Vision has been given an artifact: Indigo Star Piece
Vision can expect a Camelot bounty for keeping the artifact.
Goku get's a thumbs up for a job well done! (Unless you want to fight vision for the artifact =P)
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