11-28-2014, 06:49 PM
Shang - How nice of you to keep that boy company.
Magus – Lovely start back from a long hiatus. I’d loosely followed your writing before, so I was acquainted with the character. That said, you do a great job of having this post read much like a re-introduction to the character. Kind of like when a movie has a sequel a decade or so after the original? I don’t know… I’m just trying to say your post did a good job emphasizing the important parts of Magus’ personality without drowning a reader in information from months old posts. Who knows if this will turn into anything, given your trend of posting, but I’d certainly keep reading along if it does.
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Return to Coruscant
Samus – You do a very nice job contrasting Samus the Bounty Hunter and Samus the Human. So often she comes off as a badass, and then (as you do near the end of the first post) you remind us that she isn’t infallible. She may wear a suit of metal, but she’s flesh and blood like anyone else. I also always enjoy reading your posts, because you do a nice job of subtly seeding in reminders of ‘omniverse canon.’ Stuff like how time is weird in the Omniverse and how summoning and omnilium work. It also make me laugh that you have such a more mechanical approach the summoning than Proto Man (who is actually a robot).
As a fan of Bowser and turtle’s in general, I appreciate the incorporation of Koopa gangsters in the lower tiers. I’ll probably steal or reference that at some point when I have my own return to Coruscant.
I am officially mortified by the Stalker. Like… holy shit.
I'm actually sad that you relationship with the Empire has soured. I would have liked to see more and maybe seen a more gradually development of antagonism between Samus and the Empire. Then again, if it means Samus gets to have wacky adventures in the Vasty Deeps, I'm all for anything! <3
Vitruvius – First things first, I hadn’t read your threads before this in any depth. That said, you write a machine better than I think I could. It’s something about your word choice and style. Even so, you have a character who is very likeable, despite the fact that he’s still very much trying to find his own ‘identity’ and purpose in the Omniverse.
Both – I enjoyed your short post back-and-forth near the middle/end of page 1. In a weird way, it built suspense for me as a reader, because even though I knew they’d side together, the rapid pauses kept making me wonder how the next post would open. I would have had even more suspense had I not been privy to the plot.
Speaking of suspense, the scenes involving the two of you preparing to make a run for it were extremely well-done. I would have enjoyed a slightly longer dog fight scene as you both fled from Coruscant, but what I read was awesome (the missile storm was an awesome visual). I look forward to seeing more from this duo (trio if you include Harry).
Magus – Lovely start back from a long hiatus. I’d loosely followed your writing before, so I was acquainted with the character. That said, you do a great job of having this post read much like a re-introduction to the character. Kind of like when a movie has a sequel a decade or so after the original? I don’t know… I’m just trying to say your post did a good job emphasizing the important parts of Magus’ personality without drowning a reader in information from months old posts. Who knows if this will turn into anything, given your trend of posting, but I’d certainly keep reading along if it does.
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Return to Coruscant
Samus – You do a very nice job contrasting Samus the Bounty Hunter and Samus the Human. So often she comes off as a badass, and then (as you do near the end of the first post) you remind us that she isn’t infallible. She may wear a suit of metal, but she’s flesh and blood like anyone else. I also always enjoy reading your posts, because you do a nice job of subtly seeding in reminders of ‘omniverse canon.’ Stuff like how time is weird in the Omniverse and how summoning and omnilium work. It also make me laugh that you have such a more mechanical approach the summoning than Proto Man (who is actually a robot).
As a fan of Bowser and turtle’s in general, I appreciate the incorporation of Koopa gangsters in the lower tiers. I’ll probably steal or reference that at some point when I have my own return to Coruscant.
I am officially mortified by the Stalker. Like… holy shit.
I'm actually sad that you relationship with the Empire has soured. I would have liked to see more and maybe seen a more gradually development of antagonism between Samus and the Empire. Then again, if it means Samus gets to have wacky adventures in the Vasty Deeps, I'm all for anything! <3
Vitruvius – First things first, I hadn’t read your threads before this in any depth. That said, you write a machine better than I think I could. It’s something about your word choice and style. Even so, you have a character who is very likeable, despite the fact that he’s still very much trying to find his own ‘identity’ and purpose in the Omniverse.
Both – I enjoyed your short post back-and-forth near the middle/end of page 1. In a weird way, it built suspense for me as a reader, because even though I knew they’d side together, the rapid pauses kept making me wonder how the next post would open. I would have had even more suspense had I not been privy to the plot.
Speaking of suspense, the scenes involving the two of you preparing to make a run for it were extremely well-done. I would have enjoyed a slightly longer dog fight scene as you both fled from Coruscant, but what I read was awesome (the missile storm was an awesome visual). I look forward to seeing more from this duo (trio if you include Harry).
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