Darkshire - The Breach OOC fight thread

[Ezrihel]

Round Two Results

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Sarah, you're doing better than before, and I know Sarah (IC) isn't really ever super stressed feeling, or feeling like she might lose, but I liked the little bit of a desperation "front" she put on when she felt trapped. You did have a few of those strange formatting issues again though. If you're typing your post up in google docs and pasting it over, be sure to properly space on the site, because Docs will skip you down a line when the page breaks, but that formatting doesn't carry over to OV. Make sure you preview your post before posting as well.

For everyone: you should try to improve your scale. Make it feel like their is a huge noisy battle going on around you. I want to be reminded of the swords and guns and clubs being thrown around around you. I want to know how chaotic and jumbled everything is. I want to see secondaries get in the way and get rekt by your primes. I need to be convinced that this is a nitty gritty dirty battle field. I want to know that your characters are fighting for their homes, their lives, everything they stand for and hold dear (or hate and want to destroy for whatever reason). I should be convinced that this is important to each and every one of your characters. This is the biggest point thus far.
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