Assault on Darkshire - Spearhead OOC

[Ezrihel]

Yep here it is 

Current post count: 26
Current Earned OM: 9598.13
Current Spent OM: 0
Buying: Communicator, Fire Blast, Glyph Strike
Cost: 1100 OM
New Spent OM: 1100

You mean that first roster post? I'm supposed to update that too?

Yes please. I'm pretty sure you were asked somewhere before to update your roster to include a bit of information about your character. Not updating your roster does nothing but inconvenience your opponents and judge who have to scour the forum for just the description of a move or assume vague things about your appearance/personality. It makes it a bit hard for others to  write for your character in threads and leads to you being included less in their posts (because I for one know that I would avoid trying to RP or PvP someone with an improper roster.)

FINAL RESULTS

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http://i.imgur.com/qxtbsJu.jpg(link)

Okor + Revan = 119.5(x1.3 Defenders Bonus) = 155.35
Illidan = 105(x1.5 Desperation Bonus) = 157.5

Congratulations Illidan, you've won, and managed to kill the other two- but! You're at death's door. You should probably seek some form of medical assistance soon.

Okay, so Revan: You really do need to work on communicating more with your fellow authors. I know that can be difficult because of time zones and what not, but that's why rounds last five days. Also, you super didn't count in the last round because it wasn't in your roster or properly linked in your purchases log(which is a violation of the rules, you need to link the post where staff approve the move). You uhm, also forgot to mention Illidan's T2 super with a 150 foot diameter that you would have had to deal with, hence you taking that much damage in the final round.

I am very glad that you've been picking up on the system thus far though! You have made some great progress since your first post. While this has been a rocky and uncertain fight I have noticed that you've been learning a good deal. Don't be afraid to ask for help/advice from other members in the community. You can get proof-reading assistance and advice on your posts during a fight, you just gotta ask.

You could have done with a bit more improvement on your scale. Revan didn't really feel super desperate or worried through out the fight with the exception of one line in your third post. I didn't feel compelled to believe that it was down to the wire, that Illidan's undead army was horrifying or that you maybe felt utterly repulsed by Okor and his decay and use of the dead as well. I just didn't get very much identity from your character.

You should strive to improve on writing out dealing damage and taking damage in your posts. If someone spends a paragraph attacking you, you should try to spend a paragraph attempting to dodge/block or counter-attack. You could do well to work on your realism while writing other's characters. I know it feels hella weird at first (the first PvP style I learned actively forbade ever writing someone else's character, so I know the feeling) but you should try to show someone's character in the most accurate light possible. I really doubt that Illidan would have charged right towards Revan's T1 attack, especially in his powered down and relatively calmer/more collected state. If you don't know how someone would response IC, just ask the writer of said character.

If anyone wants more in-depth critiques/reviews, feel free to add me on Skype (notika-anastasia-smith), Discord (Ezzy#1026) or PM me here.[/spoiler]