Assault on Darkshire - Spearhead OOC

[Ezrihel]

Round Two Results

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Advice to Revan: You need to work on both your realism and your technical. Commas are incredibly important punctuation and you don't ever use them at any time during your posts. This lack of separation makes every sentence drone on, seem slow and very long winded. It weighs down your fight post and makes it almost painful to read.

As for your realism score, yeah. You still need to very much work on trading blows with your opponent within your post. Don't be afraid of writing someone's character. If you're uncertain, send them a PM and ask "Hey I'm planning to do [move], what would your character do in response to it?" This is a collaborative writing site, after all. I understand that you're in Australia, and it can be a bit difficult for you to have a full blown conversation with the other writers on the site, however, you should still try to communicate with them.
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