Official Move Approval IV

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Ice Strike , ranged proficiency
Description: Revan fires a single ice bolt the size of one of his arrows out of his palm that travels the speed of a dart and can go up to 25 metres. The bolt is designed to pierce armour and freeze a targets wound causing further pain resulting in moderate damage. takes 10 seconds to form before being shot at an opponent and needs 1 minute to recharge. User must focused and aimed carefully and must be stationary though once shot can be forgotten about. 

The ice bolt can then be removed or allowed to melt over time. 


Shadow Barrage

Description: Revan creates a cloud of black smoke like substance around himself before using both arms to launch it at an enemy which it then attaches itself to causing moderate damage around the intended target.

This cloud can expand to fit over a single enemy of any size so long as they are not larger then say a mammoth or else it will only harm as much of their body as possible.

This attack requires full stationary focus and can be fired after only a minute of charging but takes an hour to be used again.

The cloud exists on its target for only ten seconds but will cause  the target great pain as the shadow attempts to rip its target apart.
Once fired the move can be forgotten about but must focus long enough for it to reach its intended target or else it may go astray.
Has range of 10 metres.

You're still missing many of the details you mention earlier. It looks like you only added range here.

These are moves for my NPC, Kito

Kunai (Physical Strength, Ranged) (600) – The Kunai is one of the more common Ninja Tools. They are relatively small, black coloured, dagger-like weapons that are 26cm (10.24 inches) long from end to end. Kito doesn't carry a lot of them on him, roughly a dozen or so, and must summon more once he depletes his supply and can't recover them from the battlefield.


Kito uses his kunai in two ways; he can use them for hand to hand combat, opting to use kunai in situations where his sword may not be as useful to him (cramped/ small areas etc.). He can also throw them, turning them into a ranged projectile. The effective distance that kito can toss them is about 25 meters. Anything further than that and they begin to loose their effectiveness, eventually just dropping to the ground.


Shuriken (Ranged) (600) – Shuriken are one of the most basic Ninja tools in Kito's arsenal. They are sharpened, four-pronged, metal stars which are made from a kind of iron or steel. Each star is 7.5 centimetres from the tip of one point to the tip of another. Kito keeps a maximum of 30 of these on him at all times, and can throw up to 6 at a time (3 in each hand). The maximum effective range of these stars is 40 meters. Anything further and the projectiles will decline in speed and will fall to the ground.

Approved.