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Official Move Approval IV
(12-19-2016, 03:20 PM)Mark Wrote: Sabrina
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(12-15-2016, 03:09 PM)Sabrina Wrote: Thank you for the lookover!

About the issues:

Guardian Shield - I may not have described it properly, but what I meant is that the shield can be used as a melee weapon. Sabrina could fly up and drop onto an opponent with the shield in front of her to crush them. But the shield is not throwable. I'd be fine with the move costing 900 though.
I bolded the edits that I made to clarify on the issues you mentioned, and detailing some rough edges.

Combat Knife - Bolded the edits for a static range.

Bolter Cannon - 300 for the bullets, 300 for combining the magazine-ejecting and the reloading, and 300 for saving the magazine for later. I figured that the last two would be different enough (since it makes it unpredictable as to when Sabrina would throw the magazine, if at all) to price each at 300 each.
As I did with the other moves, I've edited some stuff and bolded it. To keep it matching to the Hornet Chaingun's move description I also noted its weight (bolded, of course).
I also changed the Bolter Cannon's mag size from 30 to 10 rounds per mag, as 30 seemed a little too big for a weapon that can be fired only once a second at most.

Hornet Chaingun - A big section at the bottom was added, and some minor bolded edits here and there.

Hope that with the above edits everything is okay!

Shield: I’m still wondering if this is resummonable and the logistics behind it. I see that it cannot be repaired, but can it be resummoned in combat or is that just something that happens outside of combat? I ordinarily wouldn’t care too much if it were just a regular shield but the fact that you can deploy it makes that point sorta important. Hitting them with the shield wouldn’t cost you extra as long as it basically adds no damage to the attack beyond what a regular punch or whatever would. If you want a stronger bash-type move you’d need to pay for it. Not sure of your intent, but feel free to choose.
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Reposting Guardian Shield below for reference, with bolded parts being the newest edits (I un-bolded everything from the last time):
-I clarified that the "traditional summoning" means that it must be done out of combat.
-Also yes - I did mean for the shield to be a melee weapon for bashing as well. This would bump the cost to 900 or 1200, if I'm not mistaken? My bad for not having considered this from the start. (bashing someone and charging/dropping onto someone, these are pretty similar in terms of their functionality but may be different enough to require 1200 total. Either of these is fine by me)

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Guardian Shield (900/1200, Physical Strength, Area Shield Profs, Flight): As if the staggering armor wasn’t sufficient already, Sabrina wields the Guardian Shield, a barricade of solid metal, which she uses to guard herself against frontal attacks. It's also quite durable as it's made of solid steel, but to make it light and handlable it's thin enough that a sufficiently powerful attack can penetrate the shield. However, any damage sustained cannot be repaired in combat as it must be repaired using traditional Omnilium summoning (impossible to do during a fight, as it takes upwards of 10 minutes of uninterrupted concentration). However, When it’s attached to her back the shield does not block damage for some reason; it simply lets attacks pass through.

It’s roughly 1,5m tall and 80cm wide.

Pulling the shield from her back or putting it back takes ~2 seconds. While wielding it Sabrina only has one arm at her disposal which she can use to wield any weapon requiring only one hand or none at all.

Once in hand the shield functions like a regular shield, covering about 3/4ths of Sabrina’s body if held correctly, though her lower legs or her head will remain exposed if she decides to cover the respective other bodypart.

The shield can also be deployed as a barricade by slamming its bottom side into the ground with force, digging it into the ground - this takes ~2 seconds. While this allows Sabrina to use both hands while using the shield as cover, it also means that she is unable to use the shield again unless she yanks it back out, which takes ~5 seconds of pulling during which she’s unable to use other moves, or move. The shield can also be left behind in this state, which carries the risk of her opponent(s) using it for their own cover.

Finally, the shield can be used as a decently effective way of attacking an opponent by means of bashing, by charging someone with it, or even by flying, then dropping onto them. Its size and weight make it very unwieldy though.
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