Appraising the First Avenger - C&C Thread

[Jade Harley]

AHH, EXCELLENT! You have a superb grasp of dialogue and character, the only complaints I would have is that there's a few typos here and there. Also, some of the time your characters kind of... float in space, y'know? Like, the setting crops up a few times, but otherwise there aren't very many vivid or descriptive things involved. Which is still GOOD, I'm not asking for a novel on the color of the leaves or exactly how the sun shone in their eyes, but maybe just a sentence to indicate their surroundings would help a great deal. Uses a few senses beyond sight, maybe. Just something to ground your characters every second post or so.