Appraising the First Avenger - C&C Thread

[Centurion]

I joined this site partly because I loved the idea and partly so that I could become a better writer. I've seen some stellar storytellers thus far, and I'd love to join their ranks. So, if you feel generous, a bit of your time and a lot of your opinions would be greatly appreciated. feel free to pick through any and all of my posts, but I'd personally prefer if you picked on more recent ones. At the time of this post, I'm involved in this thread: (http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?...n=lastpost) and this one: (http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=6548). My writing tends to be consistent, so i have no real preference for which post you read. Even if you want to read a few to gauge my overall style. Overall, I would greatly apreciate some constructive criticism on my work. many Thanks!!