Appraising the First Avenger - C&C Thread

[Centurion]

After a while since the last time I've been appraised, I'm ready to bring my work back to the table. I recently started an NPC thread in the endless dunes (http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?...5#pid91865) and I've been active for a while in this thread here (http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=6548). Mayhaps one of you wonderful writers could take the time to assess my works and give me some feedback? I'm more than open to criticism and excited to hear what you guys have to say. I'd really appreciate any and all effort you guys and gals would put into seeing how I'm coming along.

Thanks!