Move Creation Workshop

[Weiss Schnee]

Moves:

Venom Spit: (300 OM) (requires Ranged Proficiency and Debuff Proficiency) (for both RainWing forms)

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Description: Two black streams of venom are fired out of Glory's longest fangs. The user must unhinge their mouth all the way open, like a snake, to spit this venom. It travels up to 12 feet long for the Anthro Form and 24 feet for RainWing form. The venom requires minute concentration, so less so that it can be interwoven with punches, kicks, and claw attacks easily. Venom Spit can be used while moving.

It takes around 3 seconds for Glory to open her mouth all the way and concentrate on spitting the venom.

The venom dissolves its target at an alarming speed. The speed of dissolving is even faster when the venom is sprayed at a wound or in the eyes.

In the Wings of Fire universe, the venom only worked on organic matter. Here, however, it can dissolve non-organic matter as well. However, if Glory is fighting, say, a robot, the venom would dissolve the eyes at the same speed as the body.

The venom can kill for Glory in the event of a fight win.

Weaknesses: Venom Spit cannot be used with other moves. Its long range is something of a weakness as it takes a few seconds to cancel, so it can easily hit an unintended target. Glory is not immune to her own venom. Instead of tiring her out, she has a very limited supply of it that, if continually used, will drain itself in about 1 minute.

Debuff: The venom causes severe pain to the opponent, making it hard to focus. If the opponent has at least 2x Glory’s ATK stat in their DEF stat, they can shrug off the venom. However, if the opponent has less than 2x Glory’s ATK stat in their DEF stat, the venom will cause more pain and greater scarring.

"an alarming speed" is a little vague here, which I think'd need to be a little better put.
If I'm getting it right though, firing something for 1 minute straight that sounds like even a tiny bit of would leave some serious damage seems pretty strong though, especially if you're also adding Debuff.

Other than that, to my knowledge in the OV, while you can make moves weaker against certain creatures, it doesn't allow you to BOOST the damage against a specific target.
So you can make it so that it dissolves the robot as slow as the regular spit regardless of if it hits in the eyes or not, but do keep in mind that it doesn't actually boost the moves capabilities.
If you already know this, though, just ignore my jawing on.

Other than that, these passages seem a little contradictory:

the venom requires minute concentration, so less so that it can be interwoven with punches, kicks, and claw attacks easily. Venom Spit can be used while moving.

seems to conflict with this:

[quote]It takes around 3 seconds for Glory to open her mouth all the way and concentrate on spitting the venom.

and this:

Venom Spit cannot be used with other moves.

Weaknesses: Venom Spit cannot be used with other moves. Its long range is something of a weakness as it takes a few seconds to cancel, so it can easily hit an unintended target

I'm not sure how much of a weakness that'd be, to be honest.

Other than that, given your attack is 1, the power to quickly dissolve people with something that possesses both a very large amount of "ammunition" and a constant, steady stream could be a little too much.

One thing that might help is knowing the speed - how fast does the venom spray?