Ooh! This sounds so much fun! I hope I'm posting in the right spot. Here goes!
Okay, I'm doing Format B, and I chose to read Tartaros' 'Forgotten Betrayal' post. My review is as follows:
"One of the more beautiful pieces of work I've read in general. The emotions throughout the city, the sorrow and anger of the remaining soldiers, the brutality of it all... Beautiful. I could literally imagine Tartaros' voice addressing the soldiers with a weak and tired body, but a strong heart and fierce conviction.
It really made this writer shudder to her knees in delight with such vivid and painstaking detail. I just can't get enough of the powerful execution of the entire post; it felt, to me of course, like it made its own short story. The only issue I see is the word prepared was repeated twice in the story, but it's nothing a quick revision can't fix, I'm sure! If you don't mind, I can offer my proofreading services on the next post. But I'm sure you don't need it as everything else was well written and up to snuff!
Overall, the flow of it all is impeccable, and the reread value is high. I want to go back and read it again from the start, that's how bad I'm hooked. Amazing work; it makes me want to read more!"
Okay, I'm doing Format B, and I chose to read Tartaros' 'Forgotten Betrayal' post. My review is as follows:
"One of the more beautiful pieces of work I've read in general. The emotions throughout the city, the sorrow and anger of the remaining soldiers, the brutality of it all... Beautiful. I could literally imagine Tartaros' voice addressing the soldiers with a weak and tired body, but a strong heart and fierce conviction.
It really made this writer shudder to her knees in delight with such vivid and painstaking detail. I just can't get enough of the powerful execution of the entire post; it felt, to me of course, like it made its own short story. The only issue I see is the word prepared was repeated twice in the story, but it's nothing a quick revision can't fix, I'm sure! If you don't mind, I can offer my proofreading services on the next post. But I'm sure you don't need it as everything else was well written and up to snuff!
Overall, the flow of it all is impeccable, and the reread value is high. I want to go back and read it again from the start, that's how bad I'm hooked. Amazing work; it makes me want to read more!"
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