08-18-2016, 06:05 PM
I like it. It's decently well written, and it's a spike of activity in a rather inactive part of the site.
I like the way you'd set it up. I was expecting you to be going somewhere with it, but if you don't have a goal in mind might I suggest our secondary protagonist come to a conclusion about his purpose? It seems like a voyage of self discovery, in some ways.
I like the way you'd set it up. I was expecting you to be going somewhere with it, but if you don't have a goal in mind might I suggest our secondary protagonist come to a conclusion about his purpose? It seems like a voyage of self discovery, in some ways.