08-20-2016, 02:44 AM
(08-07-2016, 10:41 AM)Jeanne d Wrote:(08-07-2016, 10:29 AM)Omni Wrote: Hey Jeanne, just read that the duration is fifteen seconds for that move. Apologies for missing it, it was a long description
That would be too long without much more significant downsides. With the fact that this move 'takes its toll' in mind (I'm basically assuming that means that it's on the larger end for fatigue as far as moves go), I might suggest the following durations.
Stand Down: 10 seconds.
Attack: 10 seconds.
Stop: 5 seconds.
How would that sound? That's without changing any of the other description.
It's fine, we're all humans and however that saying goes. I know more than well that with that move a bunch of things flew under my radar more than once xD
Comes with "2 pages in google drive"-moves.
As for the suggestions; those would work fine for me. The core concept of the move isn't ruined nor sabotaged by the change to durations, and frankly they're one of the slip ups I had when drafting the move that did not occur to me until now.
I didn't think of making the durations of each command different.
And yes, I'd the toll on her is pretty significant, considering she can only use three command seals in total in a single fight (With the other restrictions in place), before she's out of juice.
TL;DR: Works for me, yup.
Approved? Not approved? Bump bump.
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