Official Move Approval IV

[Mark]

I'd read and understood what you wrote in italics, I was more asking to clarify if he could possibly be firing a gun or something while tossing the chain or while keeping your foe restrained. You'd obviously be able to use a move after the chain pull was complete/while they're coming toward you, I'm wanting to know if the moves could be used at the same time. I understand what you're getting at, but I'm trying to make it crystal clear to anyone else who might see you use this in the future.

Hunting Chain - Requires Physical Strength and Ranged Proficiency - 300 OM

A reinforced steel chain of around twenty-five feet in length with an attached hook, kept by Tartaros on his mag-lock belt. This chain is designed to be thrown with the off hand and to hook into or wrap around fast-moving targets, allowing the wielder to temporarily trap their mark and pull them forward, before going in for the kill with a proper attack. 

However, it is significantly more difficult to land a hit with this attack while moving than while still for the wielder, they cannot use any attacks while pulling and the chain can be struggled out of, with the time taken for the target to free themselves depending on their ATK compared to the wielder's. The higher the target's ATK, the faster it is to break out. The chain can be re-summoned after around five seconds of careful concentration if broken. 


Right, this should be better. Sorry 'bout the hassle.

No problem! Thank you for your patience. You're approved.

Rapid Density Increase (Requires Physical Strength) - 300


Over a span of 0.5 seconds, Vision densifies his limbs until they are as dense as diamonds. They can remain this dense for 1 second at a time. He then swings at a target, doing more damage than he would with his regular limbs, but moving much more slowly. He is also heavier when his fists are this dense, so he moves slower, and cannot fly. He may use other Moves while using this one, but since it requires a decent amount of concentration to maintain, Vision will have difficulty aiming his other moves. While there is no cooldown, repeated use will tire Vision out.

Better? Also, is the Super Move approved?

Looks good, it's approved. The Super is also approved once you make the edits/changes I noted.

Thunder Quake - 300 - (requires: Area Attack, Physical Strength)
Thor slams his Hammer into the ground, sending lightning shooting out in a 10ft circle with him at its center. The attack is meant to take out many weak enemies, but it is little more than an annoyance to most primes. Based on DEF a prime may feel little more then an uncomfortable stinging all the way to an almost debilitating shock. The lightning might stun weaker primes but the effect is minimal. The lightning last for 1 second. This move can only be used once every 5 or 10 seconds so that it can pull electricity from the air around it. After using this attack Thor's Hammer loses much of its power (both swung and thrown) until it finishes recharging. Thor cannot use this attack while moving.

(basically I want the move to take out cannon fodder secondaries, like stormtroopers or Volvagia's dragon spawned brood. Obviously if a couple space marines or some elder drakes show up I would give them each some one on one attention. I would rarely if ever use it on primes or enemies even close to the strength of because it would be basically useless. There is no charge time because I want it to be useful in only a few situations. How can I set it up so that it does that and can be approved?)

If you're only planning on using this to kill off weak secondaries like faceless thugs in story events (i.e. non-competitive, non-graded stuff) and never player-controlled Primes, I'd say you wouldn't even need a move; it can just be a flashy hammer slam. Just remember that like Amaterasu said above, you can't blanket every secondary as a weakling. Those summoned by stronger primes (like Palpatine, Aragorn, etc.) would be stronger than most Primes by virtue of having a strong summoner. Even Stormtroopers (despite how most people play them) wouldn't be decimated by the attack, probably just knocked down or stunned depending on how many are in the AoE.