Rin's joining Application

[Mark]

Daniel is the best.

The IP address for this account matches The Humble Sage. Since you're a friend of his that makes sense, but we'll need proof that you're separate people. The easiest way to do this is to take a picture of the two of you side-by-side holding signs with your characters' names on them. You can blur your faces of course. You can PM the picture to myself or if you're more comfortable, to one of the site Admins (Omni or Alex).

As for your history, when exactly was Rin taken to the Omniverse?

For you moves, give this a read and try to hit all of the bullet points.

Ah yeah that makes sense. I'll grab a pic once he gets back and send that to you.

A few weeks after escaping into the internet. I can add that in.

Re-specified Moves
Regular Move:
Sphere Blast [300 OM] - A sphere of energy originating from the user and expanding outwards to a max 3ft radius. It is an area attack and effects everything within the area, excluding Rin herself. It takes 5-10sec to charge, less than 1 second between release and dissipation. It cannot be aimed. The user can use minimal movement to dodge attacks for example but for the most part must be stationary. The user must focus on the charging, but after release no concentration is necessary. After effects include nausea and fatigue to the user that last between 10-30 seconds. To the observer, Sphere Blast appears as a mostly translucent shell of white energy. It is performed by clasping hands together in front of the chest and focusing the 'chi' of the user into an outward attack. Getting hit with the sphere blast feels like getting hit by a large blunt object, varying in density depending on the targets defense. The move has a fixed method of use.
Special Move:
Deus ex Machina [1SP + 600 OM] - A more powerful variation of the Sphere Blast. A sphere of energy originating from the user and expanding outwards to a max of 7ft radius. It is an area attack and effect everything within the area, excluding Rin herself. It takes 30sec to 1min to charge, less than 1 second between release and dissipation. It cannot be aimed. The user MUST remain stationary and focused while charging the attack. After effects include extreme nausea and potentially loss of consciousness. Deus ex Machina appears as a barely translucent shell of white energy. It is performed by planting the feet firmly on some stable surface, clasping hands together in front of the chest, and focusing the 'chi' of the user into an outward attack. Getting hit with the sphere blast feels like getting hit with a large solid block of ice, varying in density depending on the targets defense. The move has a fixed method of use.

Sorry if my explanations suck, The Humble Mage is the one with the head for rules, I don't naturally think in specifics of combat unfortunately, though I'm trying to improve.

Just let me know if there's anything else I need to work on and I'll get to it. Thanks!

No problem! It's a learning process to write up moves so we don't expect perfection right off the bat.

For the basic form of Sphere Blast, is there an overall stamina drain? Or does the nausea get worse the more often he does it?

For the Super Move version, you don't need such a long charge time. As it costs SP in combat, you can get away with doing larger amounts of damage with fewer downsides. You could actually keep the charge the same as the regular version if you want. If for some reason you prefer the longer charge time, I'm fine with that also =P. Just letting you know. Also as a minor clerical thing, you don't need to list the SP cost in the move description, just put 'Tier-1 Super Move' and everyone will know what you mean.

EDIT: Also, you don't need the crippling nausea or unconsciousness either for the Super if you don't want it. Just 'really tiring' is fine.