Depiction Feedback

[Jade Harley]

I think you're doing just great! Your description of the different locations your character visits are pretty solid and pleasantly refreshing usually. NPC interactions are also just fine as you've written them, maybe a little abrupt at times (conversations ending a bit too quickly can be confusing, though that's just my opinion), but otherwise they have a good, natural flow and fit into your story well. Your Dunes posts are simply excellent, I love your take on the setting and inhabitants!