02-15-2018, 04:32 AM
@Warren:
>Split this up. Make a gatling laser move and a shield move. Don't shove it all together as one.
>Remove the reference to "Shield-P" from Gatling Laser. I.e., this:
>What is the fire rate of the Gatling Laser? How fast do the lasers go?
"The first will simply block attacks that he is capable of defending against"
>Not enough information. This is not a description of the move, just a very brief uninformative explanation of what it does.
"The second will take the attack, and then retaliate by firing a 2 by 3 foot beam of energy out at the opponent who has dealt the attack with a high amount of power"
>Why should the shield here be just as strong as the first one when it does something else as well?
>2 by 3 foot doesn't make sense. That's not a measurement you can use to describe a laser - unless you want it to be a large rectangular beam?
>Again, not enough description.
"and the third version of the shield will retaliate, but instead of firing a beam of energy it will instead be like the opponent has been struck by a bolt of lightning"
>Same as what I said for the second mode.
"It should be noted though that just a SINGLE attack from a Prime who is more powerful than him could shatter the shield with such force that he cannot use the move again for about 1 minute."
>Don't throttle yourself. I highly suggest you remove this. Damage of moves is based on both drawbacks (charge, fatigue, etc.) and ATK.
"The Lightning Bolt will paralyze one of their limbs if they use their hands for combat, or should they be not reliant on that, will immobilize them. The limb paralysis lasts 12 seconds, and the full body paralysis lasts 6."
>Put this information near where you first describe paralysis. Put the general information on fatigue and charge time nearer to the start of the move.
>This would require an extra 300 OM, since it can do two different things.
>This time is too long considering you also want a shield as well. And, presumably, you're doing damage too. That's too much.
>I highly suggest that you look at some other shield moves. Also, split up your shield move so it's clear how each version works and how they're different.
>Actually, next time you post, I want to see the Gatling-Laser move and a basic (300 OM) shield move. Once your basic shield is sorted, then we can consider adding variants.
>Split this up. Make a gatling laser move and a shield move. Don't shove it all together as one.
>Remove the reference to "Shield-P" from Gatling Laser. I.e., this:
Quote:except for Shield - P. However, this cannot block super attacks, or reduce the damage of such. Any would instantly penetrate the shield, and destroy it. In addition, this shield has a 3 second cool down between uses, giving them a 3 second window during which time they can clobber him with energy attacks.Since it doesn't make sense for it to be there. Put shield strength comments in the shield move.
>What is the fire rate of the Gatling Laser? How fast do the lasers go?
"The first will simply block attacks that he is capable of defending against"
>Not enough information. This is not a description of the move, just a very brief uninformative explanation of what it does.
"The second will take the attack, and then retaliate by firing a 2 by 3 foot beam of energy out at the opponent who has dealt the attack with a high amount of power"
>Why should the shield here be just as strong as the first one when it does something else as well?
>2 by 3 foot doesn't make sense. That's not a measurement you can use to describe a laser - unless you want it to be a large rectangular beam?
>Again, not enough description.
"and the third version of the shield will retaliate, but instead of firing a beam of energy it will instead be like the opponent has been struck by a bolt of lightning"
>Same as what I said for the second mode.
"It should be noted though that just a SINGLE attack from a Prime who is more powerful than him could shatter the shield with such force that he cannot use the move again for about 1 minute."
>Don't throttle yourself. I highly suggest you remove this. Damage of moves is based on both drawbacks (charge, fatigue, etc.) and ATK.
"The Lightning Bolt will paralyze one of their limbs if they use their hands for combat, or should they be not reliant on that, will immobilize them. The limb paralysis lasts 12 seconds, and the full body paralysis lasts 6."
>Put this information near where you first describe paralysis. Put the general information on fatigue and charge time nearer to the start of the move.
>This would require an extra 300 OM, since it can do two different things.
>This time is too long considering you also want a shield as well. And, presumably, you're doing damage too. That's too much.
>I highly suggest that you look at some other shield moves. Also, split up your shield move so it's clear how each version works and how they're different.
>Actually, next time you post, I want to see the Gatling-Laser move and a basic (300 OM) shield move. Once your basic shield is sorted, then we can consider adding variants.